In My Mode (ill return feed if you post link)

[Tash8]

[singing]
I'm in, getting in my mode
downing these drinks, think it's time to go
gotta get in 'fore this thang close
then you know, we headed to the motel

smoking homegrowns, cali brewed i suppose
and incase ya'll don't know, i'm a lyrical drone
what you hear? you wont know,
should you fear? I would guess so
cause sometimes i get so, schizo-phrenic
it might take over, you say "no please don't let it"
cause you seen it before and it made you seem so pathetic
just embed it, in your head, yep and never let it again
affect us and just smoke other another blunt for the ex
cause it's best bet to rid of all problems
alcohl bottles, handles, six feet tall models
depleets all sorrows, at least till tomorrow
reality's horror, and you only live once so live it up
you'll regret it if not, but yo, you can
do what you wanna but incase you need help
i'll be looking, just holler for a taste of these tips
--till we're tiipppsssy, and sharing few hits

[singing]
I'm in, getting in my mode
downing these drinks, think it's time to go
gotta get in 'fore this thang close
then you know, we headed to the motel
I'm in, getting in my mode
downing these drinks, think it's time to go
gotta get in 'fore this thang close
then you know, we headed to the motel

we get down and dirty, we done clowned all worthy
and we ain't ever leaving till this town gets filthy
that's me being real, g, we always flying high
--peaking down the sky where these muhafuckin birds be
it's best to hide your pride, and, spare yourself surgery
and it wont be just words (see) i mean someone will get hurt (see)
--and this whole verse, is to my homies showin loyalty
I switch up my flow, move swift like the fanastic four
you ready for a show? man i'm always making one
making fun, going to a party and pulling fire alarms
go crazy, i ain't say it, but i do it
and it's what helps me get through shit
and you can, too, just vibe to my music
it's makes you feel alive through its usage
but don't ever abuse it, no more excuses
if you gonnna be douche kid, then you can move along
cause we here to act stupid.


[singing]
I'm in, getting in my mode
downing these drinks, think it's time to go
gotta get in 'fore this thang close
then you know, we headed to the motel
I'm in, getting in my mode
downing these drinks, think it's time to go
gotta get in 'fore this thang close
then you know, we headed to the motel

sip my pain away with a bottle of patron
we're here to have fun, leave trouble at home
baby i ain't looking for a Marley and Me,
i'm seeking a barbie that will party with me
and i'm hardly breathin, hit me with cpr
no driving home, show me where the D.D.'s are
we partying till we pass out
and we end up asleep in the car, till then

[singing]
I'm in, getting in my mode
downing these drinks, think it's time to go
gotta get in 'fore this thang close
then you know, we headed to the motel
I'm in, getting in my mode
downing these drinks, think it's time to go
gotta get in 'fore this thang close
then you know, we headed to the motel

[classthe_king]

This was pretty dope. I saw spots we're you had some great lyricism. Probably liked the second verse the best just because of the rhyming. It was solid throughout. Keep at it.


And you mind checkin hip-hop, it should be down a little bit on this page?

[Leviathan]

I did a track wit the same chorus...
Soundclick?

[Tash8]

I did a track wit the same chorus...
Soundclick?

yessir

[gutawafang]

Flows well, good emotional words, good vocabulary.

sip my pain away with a bottle of patron
we're here to have fun, leave trouble at home
baby i ain't looking for a Marley and Me,
i'm seeking a barbie that will party with me
and i'm hardly breathin, hit me with cpr
no driving home, show me where the D.D.'s are
we partying till we pass out
and we end up asleep in the car, till then

Awesome. I'm loving the way you use the third verse to dedicate the song to someone.

Inspiring man.

[Tash8]

thanks

[Le Tunisien]

obviously it flowed well,descent piece

[mcZu]

Second verse is best, imo. Flow seems on point, multies and rhymes scheme are good, content is not bad and the chorus seems like it might work in this context. Not bad, keep doing your thing.

[Tash8]

thanks guys, if u wanna hear the song

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