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rhymed everything ha. one rhyme scheme

Postby Boston » Nov 19th, '09, 01:51

idk i was bored.. new verse.. wat ya think kid?!

i think there pissed, they had it, they took my whips n gadgets/
go ahead n twist a sack i am on my Bishop status/
i just kicked the habit even though i wish i hadn't/
its a passion, smoke again, i just need a blizz for tappin/
now the chicks are flashin, hit the floor, tits are saggin/
skip the action, im going hard but my dicks relaxing/
every sip im laughing, every whip i get im crashing/
every lip, i dip, im packing, every dim i twist im matching/
im just sick at rappin, if you want spit a track then/
spit a track just dissing me, otherwise just quit it faggot/
cuz all this yip n yappin makes me want to get the mac 10/
im a heavy hitter all you fruits can not handle scrappin/
now the buisness slacking all because the snitches ratting/
pictures snapping, think i care? that is why the riches stacking/
so come with equipped with badges, cuff me up in the back n/
when your lips are jabbing i will cut you up n get to stabbing/

the 2nd bar (bishop) is about my boy who had to stop burning.. the mac 10/heavy hitter/fruit line is about 'groups' around here.. like a subliminal type shit but ya
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Re: rhymed everything ha. one rhyme scheme

Postby classthe_king » Nov 19th, '09, 03:13

This was awesome, rhyming was insane throughout :worship:

You goona record this? It could sound awesome.
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Re: rhymed everything ha. one rhyme scheme

Postby Xray » Nov 19th, '09, 08:02

Flow was on point throughout, except for a line where it kinda messed up but you picked up the pace. Some pretty nice lines, internal rhymes were nice, what made this verse. My fav line:
skip the action, im going hard but my dicks relaxing/


Record this you lazy son of a bish.
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Postby gutawafang » Nov 19th, '09, 08:35

Dope flow and multis. I read it three times already. I enjoyed it. :worship:
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Re: rhymed everything ha. one rhyme scheme

Postby Boston » Nov 19th, '09, 15:09

i will record it i need money!
or anon lets me drive to his house and record there haahah na jk
good looks on the feed people
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Re: rhymed everything ha. one rhyme scheme

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 19th, '09, 19:32

Uh-oh been awhile since Boston been on the scene :o Good shit homie
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Postby Rain Matrix » Nov 19th, '09, 22:36

nice piece, nice vocab and very good use of it :y:
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Re: rhymed everything ha. one rhyme scheme

Postby Boston » Nov 20th, '09, 15:06

wordd tahnks all

bringing that fuego!
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