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The Actual Last Story of Bre (So You Thought It Ended)

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The Actual Last Story of Bre (So You Thought It Ended)

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 25th, '09, 02:40

The night is cold
I write with bold letterings and fight with coal
But my love dedication is like a thug's determination
Mug lamentations like "fuck condemnation"
Flowers bloom and my power soon will devour the moon
Coward loom away like I was the darkest cloud
The farthest shroud of Bre engulfs my thriving passion
Never dying, baddest motherfucker making bitches crying; mad and
Run from the police with a gun in hold-piece
They call me Fa-Q and I've written lots of stories
Burning pots of corny raps and my scent got her horny
Caught the boring hip hop fans in a wine bottle
Fine models hopping up and down like a light rattle

The last verse I'm spitting like a kite in the
Air suspended like a mayor banned from his own city
Lone kitties I discover and hug, then fuck her and bust
Mutter these cuts; so "high" I "hover" and thus
I show love to girls and throw gloves to the world
Like "Fuck the Globe" and thus I know than my luck is gold
The spring blossom makes pretty girls sing "Possum"
Text with "fring", lot of bitches try to get me on their contacts, hah
But I only love Bre; fought tactics and got latex condoms
Ponder-ing the secret of life in the fetus of light
Two verses done already but I still haven't fucked Betty
Shooting parodies like feuding with Carey and looting Mary
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: The Actual Last Story of Bre (So You Thought It Ended)

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 25th, '09, 05:43

Dude you think I would be mad lol but that shit was actually pretty funny man, you nailed how I do my structure
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Re: The Actual Last Story of Bre (So You Thought It Ended)

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 25th, '09, 08:58

Fa-Q wrote:Dude you think I would be mad lol but that shit was actually pretty funny man, you nailed how I do my structure


I knew you wouldn't get mad. I was hella bored and I just was surprised you had another Bre story. You got good structure and multies, in general, though. I was keystyling this so it fails. :(
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Live free. Die hard.
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Re: The Actual Last Story of Bre (So You Thought It Ended)

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 25th, '09, 18:39

Hahaha dude I dig it. I can see Fa-Q's style in there lol. Nice idea
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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