My Final Song About Bre

[Fa-Q]

I'm going to soon write,
a song that you can only see when we dance in the moon light,
Ill dance with my two left feet,
Even if there's no where to dance, except street,
Put my right hand on your waist, hold your left hand,
I ask you when you stole my heart, was theft planned,
Every single time I look in her-eyes,
I'm pleasantly shook and sur-prised,
Your pierced tongue, pierces my inner core,
Each song I write her, makes me want to send her more,
But my broken heart, is already tender and sore,
Every time its broken, I'm a defender in a war,
Losing every time, its so hard to win,
I guess I'm scared of being scarred again,
But if there's ever a time, our lips meet,
When you knock me off me balance, and you trip my feet,
Revive me, when my heart skips a beat,



I guess I jus don't want another broken heart,
But I need to get past it, and be open to start,
By saying, "Come here, don't make me chase,"
You look older in your years, and here I sit with a baby face,
It may be time to burn those songs, maybe erase,
And reverse my pencil, or rip them up
without a care or stair,
Then throw them in the trash, why come back, I doubt their there,
I'm not about to dare or bare,
The pain and sorrow, that will sustain by tomorrow,
Everyday she gives me the cold shoulder,
like I'm trapped in a snow storm,
She brings the fire out of me,
So no need to know why am I so warm,
She just has to flash that smile one time,
My rain clouds dissipate and turn into sunshine,
All I know is when I'm around you, my sorrow corrects,
If I could simply borrow that hex,
That you put me under, then I will have you by today, tomorrow, or the next,


And if tomorrow never comes, I'll hold you until sunrise,
I'll stair into your eyes, and make sure not one cries,
Thinkin of you, I'm about to sleep,
With you in my dreams, there's no reason to count sheep,
Here I go, I'm going to try and face,
You, as I fly in space,
Would you comet(comment) If I write bars,
Just for you on all bright stars,
If there were dirt and sand, on my hurt hands,
Would you kiss my light scars,
Your beauty makes Mars go to war,
And make envious Venus, not want to be apart of the stars any more,
I've learned to cherish every moment,
Cause every moment with her, could perish at any moment,

[Fa-Q]

Bump-pa-pa-pa-pa

[Slim Zaddy]

mmmmm, interesting i liked ya second verse more ,,,,,, you have some sick lines over all ,,,,,,, keep it up dude

[Yah-hah]

Yeah bro second verse kills. Nice tuff about her man It's nice to see someones whole style cjange because of someone else. Good job homie

[Fa-Q]

Thanks Zaddy and Jus

[Fa-Q]

This is my last song about Bre guys....I Promise

[Fa-Q]

Thanks PINk...

[Fa-Q]

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Here's links to my previous songs about her

[mcZu]

I could have sworn I fed this already, hmm, strange, lol.

That said, I liked it, I really enjoyed reading it. Maybe some technical flaws, but, that doesnot take away the essence. Nice job, man. Keep it up.

[Fa-Q]

Lol Zu yea I posted the first verse on this and I think you commented on that...shit gets confusing I know


But anyway thanks for the feed but what did you mean technical flaws....structure? Cause you know me and Yahhah never do structure