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This lil verse i composed

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This lil verse i composed

Postby bullet_boy46 » Nov 25th, '09, 18:56

havent been on in a LOOOOOOOOONG time I lost some tips so if this sucks, i know, i tried to remember some stuff...here it is

man fled from the scene,
left me for dead,
with a shatterd spleen
laying across the street,
like raw bloody meat, in defeat
but i knew my life was incomplete
people running to help me
they look at me and then they see
that they just cant help me,
fall on they knees and scream
this all felt like one big dream,
blood was running on E
some people call me an emcee,
some just disagree
and im alright with that,
rap right now is just one big combat
one against another,
you and your blood brother
go against each other,
to reign supreme in the streets
some people only do it for the sweets,
like hoes clothes and money
take it like its funny,
let me tell ya sunny
none of this is funny
your jo broke snorting coke
in the back of your friends hummer
what a bummer,
shoulda been a plumber or a drug dealer
driving a 4 wheeler down main street,
guys words are bullets
that there enemies take and use against them,
betta use cardizem
i make ya heart go into shock,
once it turns 10 o clock,
lock and **** the glock,
flock to the concert,
convert the undecided
make them open minded,
it seems they have been misguided

really choppy in areas, give me some help :flower: thanks
Solace wrote:Oh stop your making me blush :blinking:

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Re: This lil verse i composed

Postby Just Silver » Nov 26th, '09, 00:26

Thought it was tight

seemed skinny though
liked the blood running on E part
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