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Man (Should I Expand It?)

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Man (Should I Expand It?)

Postby bullet_boy46 » Nov 25th, '09, 20:58

I see a golden man
with tin in his hand
lookin for loose change
acting kinda strange
looking like he on pills
or something,looking
for a deal but nothin
found him on the floor
looking kinda pale
deal gone sour
a note on him says
"Come to the tower
no later then half-a-hour"
Looked for a wallet
his name was austin powers
Solace wrote:Oh stop your making me blush :blinking:

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Re: Man (Should I Expand It?)

Postby Just Silver » Nov 26th, '09, 00:23

why is structure so skinny?
i could see this to be an entertaining story with a bigger story
The ending is sort of weird lol wanna see what happens after that
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