Some specific critisicm would be great.
The psychopath might go slash your body with a meat cleaver
The lights go smash, we'll strike yo ass your weak shrieks are
Not saving you, im not blaming you, checkin your distinct features
She's not shaving dude, im paving through her now the heat leaves her
Her body's cold, nobodies home, I just wanna reach deeper
Soon you'll be rotting, old, the parties gone, can you please keep her
Down n' still, and around a lil, you don't wanna get caught, me neither
We'll pound a lil then im down to kill but not now we need her
To stall the lead before they call police, come on only three peaks are
All I need before were walking free, it won't look like we beat her
"Let's escape now, I hate how we look like a freak creature"
But it's too late now, we'll create how we saw her seep ether
Were turnin cups but why you burin up, a pretty unique fever
"Im learnin what were stirrin up I feel like the physique reaper
Ive felt her now, I gotta help her out before the beast eats her"
Well ive dealt with how her welts allow her to finally sleep deeper
it's just ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, my style ,,, get used to it bro 
but i got an LP im workng on 
,,,,,,,,,,, glad we can hear something from you now