Psychopath

[Drama Setter]

I like your rhyming man , keep it up

[Relapse.LP]

This shit is what I call MAXIMUM rhyming. LOL.

Really, rhyming was perfect. Multis too. Cuz you didn't do multis only at the end of the sentence, but you made very good attempts to do multis in the middle of the sentence. Rhyme scheme inspired me.

Your structure's good too.

This is STYLE. I can imagine it:
"Let's escape now, I hate how we look like a freak creature"
But it's too late now, we'll create how we saw her seep ether

Pretty descriptive with the MURDEROUS vocabulary. Way cool.

Good job.

Haha, that's a common technique to use internal rhyming with multi-syllabic rhyming as well, if you never saw such rhyme schemes before.

Verse had great rhyming and decent imagery, but I felt the creativity could have been better, but I'll give you kudos since you supposedly listened to 'Stay Wide Awake' before writing this.

[classthe_king]

Thanks everyone


Relapse its always somethin with you smh

[Relapse.LP]

Thanks everyone


Relapse its always somethin with you smh

I try to give constructive feedback instead of plain "good" or not, unless you rather just have people compliment you and not give a fuck about improving next time?

[classthe_king]

Thanks everyone


Relapse its always somethin with you smh

I try to give constructive feedback instead of plain "good" or not, unless you rather just have people compliment you and not give a fuck about improving next time?

I was talking about the
since you supposedly listened to 'Stay Wide Awake' before writing this.

I love you and your criticism I'll make it more creative next time

[Relapse.LP]

Thanks everyone


Relapse its always somethin with you smh

I try to give constructive feedback instead of plain "good" or not, unless you rather just have people compliment you and not give a fuck about improving next time?

I was talking about the
since you supposedly listened to 'Stay Wide Awake' before writing this.

I love you and your criticism I'll make it more creative next time

[Just Silver]

Real nice multis flow seems a little constricted at times

Overall nice peace

If u could check mine viewtopic.php?f=24&t=72741

one thing i didnt like to much was how the first line was introduced sorry if im being a dick
but you wanted constructive criticism other than that dope shit