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New identity

Postby Just Silver » Nov 28th, '09, 22:08

Took roughly 10 Minutes but i like it myself Shout out to Sajn for the new name

Im looking for a new life, no not cereal
i meant a serial number and be seriously humble
ever get to wondering ,that you want to do one thing
it blows up in your face, and end up stumbling
thats what happened and as much as rapping
means to me, immediately ,i need a napkin
seems to be, so much spit leaving these, seams of me,
even the outline of my dreams are deemed,
as a whole new "identity", like i was "bourne" in a cemetery ,
died in the womb, and wound up screwing up everything
chewing up every beef and swallowing knowledge
proof of ebonics, upcomings short like a hobbit
no biting because i fired my orthodontist
hired a surfer, to just go with flow and the words of
my tsunami wave of controversial conversions,
stay silver never gold, like a Persian ,a perfect person
that sees being the best is just worthless
because you have room to grow like my house was alive
lyrically swords and knives jab away at the spine
of my creaky crooked mind i speak with "hand signs"
and still could keep with the "blind" sink my teeth to the "green"
gotta get my "brine" then regurgitate im nervous losing "weight"
because if i do i will have an antelopes fate, of a neck to break,
and be viable for only a seconds sake, and till the record shakes,
and slips and smashes, i try to get fresh money like Tic Taxes
and a big package, so big you cant grab it, a name so big that Google is lagging
but wait no time for bragging this is my opportunity
to tell you im Just Silver this is my eulogy
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Re: New identity

Postby Just Silver » Nov 29th, '09, 02:49

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Re: New identity

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 29th, '09, 03:36

Impressive vocabulary. :worship:

Great verse overall, although multies could be more abundant, but it wasn't quite that necessary. :y:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: New identity

Postby Just Silver » Nov 29th, '09, 03:41

Relapse.LP wrote:Impressive vocabulary. :worship:

Great verse overall, although multies could be more abundant, but it wasn't quite that necessary. :y:

was going for wordplay more or less
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Re: New identity

Postby bullet_boy46 » Nov 29th, '09, 03:48

for 10 minutes this is dope, nice wordplay, nice vocab

EDIT: i couldnt go without saying check mine out :p
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Re: New identity

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 29th, '09, 03:55

Just Silver wrote:
Relapse.LP wrote:Impressive vocabulary. :worship:

Great verse overall, although multies could be more abundant, but it wasn't quite that necessary. :y:

was going for wordplay more or less


I noticed and it was great. Especially the surfing one, lol.

Can you feed mine? It's pretty damn old, but what the fuck. :D

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Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: New identity

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 29th, '09, 09:03

Diggin it homie. Always look forward to seein you improve them pen skills man. Good shit. Like the name too.
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Re: New identity

Postby Just Silver » Nov 29th, '09, 20:08

bump :whistle:
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