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Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 29th, '09, 05:11

Simply picture a plain with rivers of flame
Where every talented MC delivers his name with scalding quivers of aim
Burning hotness so abundant that to shiver in pain creates more than just a slight sliver of shame

Natural for meteors to collide with Earth
No media to spit lies and curse; our only heated "sphere" is so diverse
Quickly beat the peers with the shyest verse and enthusiastically, we all cheer with cries that hurt

Now, just visualize Planet Mars be popping
Why do "bars" keep stopping? Not only theirs, but also ours be flopping
There exists a bizarre, weird plotting; our battle scars be rotting as every single star be dropping

To the north, suddenly a stream of water
Is keen to slaughter; fires are extinguished, mics were once distinguished
This river seems so modern with her team of daughter tributaries; right in her scheme, we saw her

Explains why our globe is of seas and lands
Mics bestowed upon recent hands are disposed; far from decent raps
Once flame, but since the "mainstream" flowed; wrote my thesis that is "Go back to the fetus gland"

Put it simply, since the deadly apocalypse
Look at the NY metropolis; this "pop" makes hip hop dying like a necropolis
The ancient acropolis now shadowed by all this unoriginal Rick Ross shit who once was a cop, shit?
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse (The Message)

Postby Just Silver » Nov 29th, '09, 05:15

Nice shit weird structure though
Vocab is super nuts

Lol at rick ross

Definitely a great piece
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse (The Message)

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 29th, '09, 05:16

Just Silver wrote:Nice shit weird structure though
Vocab is super nuts

Lol at rick ross

Definitely a great piece
8/10


Thanks. :)

Lol, I was deciding whether to post 50's video on Officer Ricky. :laughing:
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby bullet_boy46 » Nov 29th, '09, 05:38

though with all the stuff goin on with me, this is a nice drop...

EDIT: I do mean it, im not joking, that ricky line was funny :happy:
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Just Silver » Nov 29th, '09, 05:40

bullet_boy46 wrote:though with all the stuff goin on with me, this is a nice drop...

i just wanna say i didnt post that

calm down guy dont act guilty

especially dont give feed if u dont mean it thats a no no
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 29th, '09, 08:25

bullet_boy46 wrote:though with all the stuff goin on with me, this is a nice drop...

EDIT: I do mean it, im not joking, that ricky line was funny :happy:


Um, thanks. :sweating:

Bumpp. :y:
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 29th, '09, 20:57

Bumppppppp.
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby mcZu » Nov 29th, '09, 23:10

Definitely a weird structure, though I like the stanzas. I enjoyed reading it, keep it up.
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 29th, '09, 23:12

mcZu wrote:Definitely a weird structure, though I like the stanzas. I enjoyed reading it, keep it up.

Thanks. The structure was on purpose, obviously, but I have no idea why. :sweating:
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Wic Kid » Nov 29th, '09, 23:12

Im not even gon bother tellin you about the weird structure, but its pretty dope. Unusual, but dope. And quite poetic. :y:
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 29th, '09, 23:14

Wic Kid wrote:Im not even gon bother tellin you about the weird structure, but its pretty dope. Unusual, but dope. And quite poetic. :y:

Thanks for the feed. :y:
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby gutawafang » Nov 30th, '09, 03:41

Multis in a poem. Fucking dope idea.

To the north, suddenly a stream of water
Is keen to slaughter; fires are extinguished, mics were once distinguished
This river seems so modern with her team of daughter tributaries; right in her scheme, we saw her
^That's my favourite stanza man.

Pretty inspiring good vocab. :worship:
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 03:43

gutawafang wrote:Multis in a poem. Fucking dope idea.

To the north, suddenly a stream of water
Is keen to slaughter; fires are extinguished, mics were once distinguished
This river seems so modern with her team of daughter tributaries; right in her scheme, we saw her
^That's my favourite stanza man.

Pretty inspiring good vocab. :worship:

Thanks. :flower:

Everyone keeps saying it's a poem. :( ... :shifty:
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The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
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Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby gutawafang » Nov 30th, '09, 03:44

Relapse.LP wrote:
gutawafang wrote:Multis in a poem. Fucking dope idea.

To the north, suddenly a stream of water
Is keen to slaughter; fires are extinguished, mics were once distinguished
This river seems so modern with her team of daughter tributaries; right in her scheme, we saw her
^That's my favourite stanza man.

Pretty inspiring good vocab. :worship:

Thanks. :flower:

Everyone keeps saying it's a poem. :( ... :shifty:

Cuz it is. :D
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 03:45

gutawafang wrote:
Relapse.LP wrote:
gutawafang wrote:Multis in a poem. Fucking dope idea.

To the north, suddenly a stream of water
Is keen to slaughter; fires are extinguished, mics were once distinguished
This river seems so modern with her team of daughter tributaries; right in her scheme, we saw her
^That's my favourite stanza man.

Pretty inspiring good vocab. :worship:

Thanks. :flower:

Everyone keeps saying it's a poem. :( ... :shifty:

Cuz it is. :D

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The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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