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Postby BILI » Nov 28th, '09, 19:42

I shoot people all the time,I`m mob,its my job,and now I`m rich
But the only time you shoot somebody you had camera bitch
You`re goin to leave this world cause I really do kill....;say goodbye
I stab bitches from the back,and then fuck`em in that hole till they die
I`m totally fucked up,I live to kill,my favorite pillow is my Desert Eagle
And ever since I was born on my fucking forehead it said Illegal
I`m on drugs,on different place,seems like I`m mad but all alone
My criminal days are over,and last thing is my blood on wall,I`m gone

Just a quick one,I was goin to write a whole song about me being a criminal,but then after 7th line I got bored,lol :D
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Re: Quick one

Postby Just Silver » Nov 28th, '09, 19:44

Not your best work ive seen some of your other stuff this sorta meh TBH

But as i say its better write something then nothing

I can totally relate to the whole getting bored thing :sweating:
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Re: Quick one

Postby BILI » Nov 29th, '09, 18:08

Just Silver wrote:Not your best work ive seen some of your other stuff this sorta meh TBH

But as i say its better write something then nothing

I can totally relate to the whole getting bored thing :sweating:

thx for the feed
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Re: Quick one

Postby Just Silver » Nov 29th, '09, 18:22

PINK wrote:Not my cup of tea, but I can see where it was going.

never seen u before welcome to Trshady :flower:

By the way this can be a :8) Bump for BILI
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Re: Quick one

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 29th, '09, 20:03

Yeah man seen better but was pretty good. Dont you hate it when you get bored after you get like a fire idea. lol
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Re: Quick one

Postby BILI » Nov 29th, '09, 20:05

Yah-hah wrote:Yeah man seen better but was pretty good. Dont you hate it when you get bored after you get like a fire idea. lol

yep,at first I was like ok,Ima do whole song,and then after few lines I was like "nah I dont feel like doin it
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