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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby bullet_boy46 » Nov 30th, '09, 03:49

relapse want to beat the shit outta people say its poem :D

those multis in the RAP are good, nahh really they dope :flower:
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 03:54

bullet_boy46 wrote:relapse want to beat the shit outta people say its poem :D

those multis in the RAP are good, nahh really they dope :flower:

Thanks. :wave:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
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Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 03:58

Coleon wrote:not gonna lie, saw the title and knew it was you nikka

I'm the only one coming up with these Kick-Ass titles with big words and some random bullshit in parentheses afterwards. :y:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Just Silver » Nov 30th, '09, 03:59

Have a feeling your going to take the topic trophy
Good Luck :y:
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 04:00

Just Silver wrote:Have a feeling your going to take the topic trophy
Good Luck :y:

Uh, thanks. Good luck to you too. I'm random-nizing the names currently. :b:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 05:59

Stanley C. wrote:Was terrible and overrated imo. I dunno y u guys arent telling him the truth. what? you scared of him or something?

I guess it was pretty good for your age though.


The phony is back? :o

I'm surprised you're not banned yet for impersonating someone you're not. :shakehead:
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The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby lilrossy » Nov 30th, '09, 06:27

yea man like everyone else said, not to keen on the structure but hey, what can i say, you fuckin killed it man, i luved it.
nice drop, keep it up. :y: :y:
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 06:28

lilrossy wrote:yea man like everyone else said, not to keen on the structure but hey, what can i say, you fuckin killed it man, i luved it.
nice drop, keep it up. :y: :y:

Thanks for the feedback. Appreciate it. :y:

Yeah, I purposely made the structure like that for no reason in particular. Looks cooler. :smoking:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Tash8 » Nov 30th, '09, 06:43

it was hard for me to pick up a flow, but the rhyming was pretty straight man, just need to fix up ur structure a bit.
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Re: Genesis & Apocalypse <The Message>

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 06:46

Tash8 wrote:it was hard for me to pick up a flow, but the rhyming was pretty straight man, just need to fix up ur structure a bit.

Thanks, man. It was supposedly more like poetry than rap, but it's all good. :y:
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The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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