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Prove Yourself

Postby lilrossy » Nov 30th, '09, 06:17

stressed, drippin sweat as i sit at this desk,
depressed, tryna get this fuckin shit off my chest,
im trippin nd flippin, grippin this pen as im put to the test,
tryna impress, while i express myself thru this text,
as this paper is pressed with this pen, again and again,
im sippin this jin, tryna release these demons within,
my head spins as feelings scream under my skin,
im writing like sin, to jimmy i feel like next of kin,
cuz im tryna win, but somethings pullin me back,
im trapped, but i know i got the potential to kill a track,
but they sayin u aint black, ya hack, u cant rap,
but i stay strapped with a pen and this pads my bomb rack,
on the microphone im droppin them, stages im rockin em,
my pages pack a punch, rappers confront, im sockin em,
with lyrical techniques over beats that enthral the streests,
so sweet, everyone stops and stare when paul speaks,

u only get, 1 chance, 1 rhyme, 1 line,
1 stance, 1 time, to shine and prove yourelf,
u only get, 1 word, 1 mic, 1 light,
be heard, 1 night, to fight and prove yourself.
Last edited by lilrossy on Nov 30th, '09, 06:19, edited 1 time in total.
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Prove Yourself

Postby lilrossy » Nov 30th, '09, 06:20

yea jus found the beat like 20 mins ago, jus had to write to it.
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Re: Prove Yourself

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 06:21

Your chorus seems extremely familiar. :-k

Anyways, nice piece. Laced with multies like raindrops and got some hard lines. Flows pretty well too, although the structure is a little uneven. Overall not bad. :y:

Mind feeding my piece too? :)

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Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Prove Yourself

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 06:23

Coleon wrote:it does sound like Lose Yourself doesn't it?

It also sounds like One Mic, but I'm pretty damn sure that wasn't his intention. :8)
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Prove Yourself

Postby lilrossy » Nov 30th, '09, 06:25

thanx for the feedbak man.

yea, the beat sounds like what you here in the middle of the movie.
thought i might do my own version of lose yourself with it.
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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