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Death letter to God

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 30th, '09, 07:56

Dear God I'm writing this letter in my own blood for my pen is dry,
MY insides are inside the same place where my pen hides,
And my dim mind has been dry for so Damn long now,
It seems like this road is damn long now,
I drink all day so I'm so damn gone now,
I'm no man, strong how? My muscles are weak,
You took the food I needed so I've been fussin for weeks,
Like fuck it you win I'm done with all your shit,
Tired of screwing up just for your kicks,
So I scream so loud you'll hear me when I'm thrown after I die,
Have to scream louder so you hear me in your "Throne in the sky",
I'll scream and scream and scream until my sound's won,
Until you find get me reason not too cause I haven't found one,
Yeah that's right I'm a loud one, yeah thats fuckin right,
Disgusted with my multis people saying 'Damn thats fucking tight',
Man I turned into something right,
Suprised I did it without ever doing something right,
But now I'm back to crusin so Fuck me, right,
You take away every homie I've ever had anyone whos ever close,
What you gonna take my girl now so I live with more scars I never show,
You gonna take my dad away and put my mom in more pain,
You gonna make me take them needles back, stab me in one more vein,
Shit I'm to the point of saying fuck these multis,
But they're all I got now that the "hands of God" won't hold me,
Say it's sac religous and how I lack forgiveness,
How I smash that kid's lips and laughed at the fact he's back in stitches,
Talkin about God like that man that is blasphemy,
All that Bible shit ya God that's trash to me,
Hell actually I hardly fuckin believe in you,
Like 'Trust the Lord' all the lies I'm seein through,
All the 'blinds' that I'm seein through make it hard to see the truth,
I need to use some more sense i suppose,
Writing all this crazy shit cause times are more tense on the road,
So God I won't say I'm sorry cause you don't like liars,
I'll just climb higher with my lighter till I set your entire empire on fire.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Death letter to God

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 07:59

This damn isn't for the tournament right? Cole gave you the inspiration, if it isn't. :shifty:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Death letter to God

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 30th, '09, 08:00

Relapse.LP wrote:This damn isn't for the tournament right? Cole gave you the inspiration, if it isn't. :shifty:


Yeah I read it somehwere don't remember where it was like CW topics in afterparty or something like that. lol
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Death letter to God

Postby Relapse.LP » Nov 30th, '09, 08:01

Yah-hah wrote:Dear God I'm writing this letter in my own blood for my pen is dry,
MY insides are inside the same place where my pen hides,
And my dim mind has been dry for so Damn long now,
It seems like this road is damn long now,
I drink all day so I'm so damn gone now,
I'm no man, strong how? My muscles are weak,
You took the food I needed so I've been fussin for weeks,
Like fuck it you win I'm done with all your shit,
Tired of screwing up just for your kicks,
So I scream so loud you'll hear me when I'm thrown after I die,
Have to scream louder so you hear me in your "Throne in the sky",
I'll scream and scream and scream until my sound's won,
Until you find get me reason not too cause I haven't found one,
Yeah that's right I'm a loud one, yeah thats fuckin right,
Disgusted with my multis people saying 'Damn thats fucking tight',
Man I turned into something right,
Suprised I did it without ever doing something right,
But now I'm back to crusin so Fuck me, right,
You take away every homie I've ever had anyone whos ever close,
What you gonna take my girl now so I live with more scars I never show,
You gonna take my dad away and put my mom in more pain,
You gonna make me take them needles back, stab me in one more vein,
Shit I'm to the point of saying fuck these multis,
But they're all I got now that the "hands of God" won't hold me,
Say it's sac religous and how I lack forgiveness,
How I smash that kid's lips and laughed at the fact he's back in stitches,
Talkin about God like that man that is blasphemy,
All that Bible shit ya God that's trash to me,
Hell actually I hardly fuckin believe in you,
Like 'Trust the Lord' all the lies I'm seein through,
All the 'blinds' that I'm seein through make it hard to see the truth,
I need to use some more sense i suppose,
Writing all this crazy shit cause times are more tense on the road,
So God I won't say I'm sorry cause you don't like liars,
I'll just climb higher with my lighter till I set your entire empire on fire.

Inflammatory line, right there. :y:

Yeah, you read it in the Afterparty's Backstage topic I made. :shifty:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Death letter to God

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 30th, '09, 08:02

Oh you made it. haha ok yeah that one. Inflammatory?
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Death letter to God

Postby gutawafang » Nov 30th, '09, 08:04

Yah-hah wrote:
Relapse.LP wrote:This damn isn't for the tournament right? Cole gave you the inspiration, if it isn't. :shifty:


Yeah I read it somehwere don't remember where it was like CW topics in afterparty or something like that. lol

I wrote Dear God last time. :D
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Re: Death letter to God

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 30th, '09, 08:08

HAHA
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Death letter to God

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 30th, '09, 13:53

Talkin about God like that man that is blasphemy,
All that Bible shit ya God that's trash to me,
Hell actually I hardly fuckin believe in you,
Like 'Trust the Lord' all the lies I'm seein through,
All the 'blinds' that I'm seein through make it hard to see the truth,

^^^ my favorite cause its funny its almost sacreligios but its not at the same time....good drop Jus
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Re: Death letter to God

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 30th, '09, 20:28

Fa-Q wrote:Talkin about God like that man that is blasphemy,
All that Bible shit ya God that's trash to me,
Hell actually I hardly fuckin believe in you,
Like 'Trust the Lord' all the lies I'm seein through,
All the 'blinds' that I'm seein through make it hard to see the truth,

^^^ my favorite cause its funny its almost sacreligios but its not at the same time....good drop Jus


Yeah I was almost hesitant to write it but I decided i would. Thanks grif
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Death letter to God

Postby Just Silver » Nov 30th, '09, 22:41

Nice staying on topic and its powerful piece

Damn you did this at 1 am :o

do u sleep lol

didnt have a favorite line because it is a story and to me it all connected

Overall 9.3/10

Good Luck for the Tourny
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Re: Death letter to God

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 1st, '09, 06:22

Thanksyall and Silver I hardly ever sleep. Thats when I finally get time to right. Thanks PINK.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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