I have a dream... (AUDIO INCLUDED NOW)

[Tash8]

not too complex of rhyming but let me know what you guys think and i'll be posting audio soon

listen
http://www.zshare.net/audio/692342475316cddb/

Who's to say that a dream can't be real?
If you think it, you can be it; at least that how's I feel
that's the faith and belief that I have in me
that's way I feel, no point in asking me
"do you think you'll be able?" "Of course," I'll respond
If I don't think I can, why do I dream for so long?
there's no comparison to the effort i put in
for each and every song
every breath that I breathe from my lungs
but no one cares to notice and it's hard to stay focused
when the rainbow of opportunity gets further when you try to get closer
and every day i get older and the days feel shorter
and the nights feel colder
see my girl used to love me and the sun was always shining
now i've lost all affection and all the good things behind me
and the best of the time of day when i get ready for sleep
cause i know i'll be livin my dream

*hook*
I'll be livin' my dream; oh uh oh
livin my dream, I wish I could though
but it's harder than it seems: oh uh oh
I'd be livin' every day like the last of each year

[Relapse.LP]

Great imagery. I look forward to hear this in audio.

Mind feeding my piece as well?

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=72783

[Tash8]

thx

[gutawafang]

Fort Minor's beat suits perfectly.

I liked it. Multis could be improved.

[Tash8]

thx man

[Yah-hah]

Audio is gonna be sick bro

[gutawafang]

Powerful stuff man

Starts out hopeful, like you can do what ever you set out to do. Then you just start adding negative stuff, you want to be asleep then awake. Then the chorus just combines it all together, you want to dream but you can't always do it. Hope you don't mind me explaining your song to you. lol

I'd be livin' every day like the last of each year

Care to explain that line, only one I didn't understand.

I think that line is something like, celebrating the end of the year everyday.

Cuz end of the year is the day we all party rite?

[Tash8]

Care to explain that line, only one I didn't understand.

the last day of each year

the last of each year is Dec 31st... what do you do at night during dec 31st? you party cause it's new years haha get it now?

[Tash8]

haha it's all good man, thanks guys

[gutawafang]

Care to explain that line, only one I didn't understand.

the last day of each year

the last of each year is Dec 31st... what do you do at night during dec 31st? you party cause it's new years haha get it now?

Yay! i got it right!

[Slim Zaddy]

i love it Tash , i could relate to it ,,,,,,,, you got some sick lines,, and lot of emotions,, i liked the hook , record this it would be ill ,,,,,,,

[Tash8]

thx guys