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Hell Hole

Postby AOBrien09 » Dec 3rd, '09, 22:48

the trickiest and wickedest when a spit lyric's about being sick of this,
life, feeling constantly kicked and knifed an the knife's is being twisted with,
my emotions, deeper it's pushed the harder it is to cope an,
depression am being soaked with like I have been chosen,
to be constantly hit with shit in my life metaphorically speaking,
so am not quick witted but am quick when it comes too feeling beating,
shits not deceiving me a know how bad things are at the moment,
feel like a been carved, scarred and it's opened, a coldened,
place inside my mind where it's hard to find a way out this crap place,
so a can't unwind even if a smoke this weed am trapped, encased
in my own depressing state where I constantly feel vexed cause I hate,
waiting for the day that come's next an having to awake,
to not mo money mo problems but too facing mo shiiiiiiiit,
when will things look up no mo waste, recycled in my fate,
death gotta be easy cause life is hard, so Michael ain't,
looking down wishing he was still here, not whining because,
our contract to god is facing this bitching while dieing is a clause,
out of this hell hole, no mo selling your soul, you know

Written quite Quick :p :flower:
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Re: Hell Hole

Postby westsidekreidy » Dec 3rd, '09, 23:01

you should probably repost this in like 2 days...all the hype over refill's leak will shadow over this

its lookin good though, record it!
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Re: Hell Hole

Postby Dee Zany » Dec 4th, '09, 03:12

"death gotta be easy cause life is hard"

damn if i had a dollar 4 erytime i heard dat
my life wood b pretty easy as a matter of fact

aside 4rm dat
i think dis shit was dope
da rhyme scheme is jus awesome & da mutlis
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Re: Hell Hole

Postby lilrossy » Dec 4th, '09, 15:41

those first 2 lines went hard. overall pretty good man. nice work. :y:
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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