Scott M vs. Wic Kid [Wic Kid WINS]

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[Verse]
this man is a player, no consideration for feelings
people talk to me about how this shit just isn't appealing
and i'm laughing along, smoking, my hands on a bong
a couple girls say "ew look at that, his hand's on her thong"
so, i'm watching him talking with a number of girls
when suddenly i see lights .. and my slumber unfurls
i wake up in the morning .. and it was all just a dream
so, who was that guy? ... wait, oh shit that asshole was me ..

[Chorus]
all this time i couldn't see ..
the man in the mirror looking at me (x4)

[Verse]
his life isn't innocent, in a sense, it's gonna end
if he keeps spilling them, opinions in, his inner sense
the people aint feeling him, he's losing the trust in his friends
girlfriends see their common sense, and never speak to him again
"look at him", all in a fren-zy, with his life stuck in a pen
and the paper that he'll never shred, writing through his dinner when
he should be eating and drinking, his life is really gonna end ..

[Chorus]
all this time i couldn't see ..
the man in the mirror looking at me (x4)

vs.

[Verse]
Elbows on the toilet seat, enormous pain in the chest
Agony's slowly joinin' me, and formin chains on my wrists
My mind is working fine, but the legs and the spine
Are uncombined, regardless of my effort to get 'em entwined
Suddenly I'm fallin down, I got hit by a blind spot
All I see is this white dot, I guess this is where my ride stops
I hit the floor, but I noticed Im still capable of movin'
I look up and see myself with empty eyes and droolin'

[Chorus]
In the end, what am I underneath this rotten pile of skin
Whose soul is bein taken by an angel with a violent grin
Or just a thrown up body waste that lost the fight within
Demon plays a violin, silently inviting sins...(2x)

[Verse]
Rejected from the shell I used to call my domain
Standin in this shitty hell, inside oval wall of my shame
Nuthin but a spit, shit, I gotta get back up there
But the other me is still still, "please become aware
Of whats goin on, get me out, this is it, our last shot"
Next thing I see, his hand starts movin, Im like "thank God"
But he's not reachin for me, oh no, water tank, STOP!
Its too late, the whirlpool's bout to end my shell's damn job


[Chorus]
In the end, what am I underneath this rotten pile of skin
Whose soul is bein taken by an angel with a violent grin
Or just a thrown up body waste that lost the fight within
Demon plays a violin, silently inviting sins...(2x)

Voting must be completely unbiased. If you already have a faint idea who you're going to vote for before even reading the submissions, don't even bother voting.

You must also break it down into the four categories: Relevance, Originality, Complexity, and Likability, or your voting will not be counted in the final tally.

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[Yah-hah]

Good stuff from both sides.
Relevance-I would say both were directly relevant as in they both told a story concerning the topic. Tie.
Originality- Man its a tough one. I liked wic's peice cause it was really sharp and the imagery was dope. Scotty Had a different point of view. I gotta go with Scotty's just because it's different than everyone elses. Scotty
Complexity- Easily wic-kid gets this one. Multis and inside throughtou. Scotty's had good lyricism but not as complex as wic. wic-kid
Likability- Honestly I thought both were dope but gotta say I enjoyed reading wic's more. The imagery and details were amazing. Just a deeper image for me. Good shit on both side but I got Wic-kid on top.

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1-0.

Keep the votes rolling, peeps.

Remember to break it down or it won't count.

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I'm not going to vote quite yet, but...

Elbows on the toilet seat, enormous pain in the chest
Agony's slowly joinin' me, and formin chains on my wrists

Both lines basically rhymes with each other, if you guys haven't caught on. 'Toilet seat' with 'Joining me'... 'enormous' with 'formin''... 'pain in the chest' with 'chains on my wrists'... Just thought I might point that out. And it makes complete sense, even with that crazy multi-syllabic rhyming.

Same with Scott M on his second verse. Not quite rhyming lines literally, but rhyming phrases like hell in his first few bars of his second verse. Dope too.

Not voting yet though...

[Yah-hah]

I think we all kinda did it with a really short amount of time.

[gutawafang]

I think we all kinda did it with a really short amount of time.

Word.

[Yah-hah]

I think we all kinda did it with a really short amount of time.

after i saw da.relapse's post, i literally opened a pm to him and keystyled it tho.

Haha yeah me too lol.

[Wic Kid]

I wrote mine in 2 minutes and 54 seconds. Personal record.

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I wrote mine in 2 minutes and 54 seconds. Personal record.

Mine was 1 minute and 37 seconds.

[BILI]

How am I supposed to vote on this??

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How am I supposed to vote on this??

Peep my OP.

Break it down into... Relevance, Originality, Complexity, and Likability. The categories' names are exactly what the description elaborates on.

[noel]

Relevance- Both were good- can't decide...

Originality- too much of a rap newbie to judge

Complexity- Wic Kid

Likability- Wic Kid

Overall- Wic Kid!!

[BILI]

Relevance-nice job by both of you,but Scott gets my vote
Originality-I think Wic got this
Complexity-Wic by far
Likability-I liked both of these,I really enjoyed readin`em but Wic was a bit better

So Wic

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3-0 KO.

Wic Kid proceeds.

[Yah-hah]

Good job wic congrats homie