The TRshady Forum became read-only in December 2014. The 10 year history will live on, in this archive.
Continue the discussion with the new home for the Eminem and Hip Hop discussion: HipHopShelter.com.

That's Just How It Ends

Want to share a poem, story or a moving article? Share creative literature text here.

That's Just How It Ends

Postby Solace » Dec 4th, '09, 04:40

Meh.

See I haven't written for weeks, I haven't spitten in sheets,
You see for me to see her would allow me to keep living you see,
In her essence, essentially present for my presence to be to this second,
This is a lesson, love I should do less in, my memory has lessened,
Before I blast this weapon, I ain't testing with my mind infested,
I see I have been bested, feeling the shame in my own reflection,
With her face engraved, I see it pretty much anywhere I try to go,
Anytime I try to write and fucking any and every time I try to flow,
Give me a semi-automatic and my family starts to panic,
God it's tragic, stop this flawless habit, hate that I'm a modest addict,
And I've never asked for much, looking back oh man it sucks,
Attract this lust, never been a fucking fan of this sadness stuff,
Always thinking about you, 'cause trying to forget didn't work,
And I'll say that shit out loud 'cause I don't need a written word,
Jesus, I wrote this piece to show all of the pieces of my heart left,
Before the little pieces become big diseases in the darkness.
Image
User avatar
Solace
Bad Influence
Bad Influence
 
Posts: 19901
Joined: Apr 25th, '08, 03:12
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby Just Silver » Dec 4th, '09, 04:46

Flowed like a motherfucker

Nice way with words

8.8/10
Image
User avatar
Just Silver
Band Leader
Band Leader
 
Posts: 7791
Joined: Jun 27th, '09, 03:40
Location: East Coast
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby lilrossy » Dec 4th, '09, 15:38

flowed well. nice vocab. good emotion.
keep it up man. :y: :y:
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
-Copywrite
Image
User avatar
lilrossy
Trailer Trash
Trailer Trash
 
Posts: 290
Joined: Nov 3rd, '07, 03:26
Location: Australia
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby Solace » Dec 5th, '09, 02:59

Thank you guys. Glad you two enjoyed it. :happy:
Image
User avatar
Solace
Bad Influence
Bad Influence
 
Posts: 19901
Joined: Apr 25th, '08, 03:12
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby Spyder » Dec 5th, '09, 05:17

:worship: :worship: :worship:

i love it man, felt the emo-tion :shifty: but no, deep piece bro

your use of multies/ rhyme sceme is similar to mine, which is why ur my fav :smoking:
ImageImageImage
User avatar
Spyder
Pill Popper
Pill Popper
 
Posts: 9418
Joined: Jan 31st, '09, 01:56
Location: El Dorado
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby Arrinef » Dec 5th, '09, 05:44

damn that shit hit me hard homie
major props
:y: :b: :y:
Image

---- Image-----
User avatar
Arrinef
Knight Rider
Knight Rider
 
Posts: 3906
Joined: Nov 21st, '09, 08:29
Location: San Antonio
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby gutawafang » Dec 5th, '09, 08:12

I seen some of the bars before. Still, it's a good job man. Good multis. :y:
ADD ME ON PS4: gutawafang
Currently playing: Destiny
Image
TR Rap Battle Record: 23-8
User avatar
gutawafang
Pill Popper
Pill Popper
 
Posts: 9474
Joined: Dec 13th, '07, 08:01
Location: Lion City
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby Solace » Dec 5th, '09, 22:38

Props everyone.

@Guta, yeah the last 4 lines are recycled from 2 other pieces. Nice to know that you still remember them :o
Image
User avatar
Solace
Bad Influence
Bad Influence
 
Posts: 19901
Joined: Apr 25th, '08, 03:12
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby classthe_king » Dec 6th, '09, 00:47

This was dope :worship:
Everything you put out recently has been amazing.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
User avatar
classthe_king
Addict
Addict
 
Posts: 14163
Joined: Feb 12th, '09, 02:30
Location: Ohio
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby Solace » Dec 6th, '09, 00:57

Well I haven't written in a while so still getting the "rust" off but still glad you liked it bro. I'll try writing verses more often.
Image
User avatar
Solace
Bad Influence
Bad Influence
 
Posts: 19901
Joined: Apr 25th, '08, 03:12
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby Solace » Dec 6th, '09, 17:49

*Bumping it up
Image
User avatar
Solace
Bad Influence
Bad Influence
 
Posts: 19901
Joined: Apr 25th, '08, 03:12
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby Nimbus_9 » Dec 6th, '09, 18:16

early on I thought you were going to let multies run your verse but it panned out, very nice drop Solace, the last 2 lines closed it out well, very good job :y:
Image
............................If You'd Like A Sig...I'm Your Guy...............................
Nimbus_9
Soldier
Soldier
 
Posts: 500
Joined: Dec 6th, '09, 05:12

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby AOBrien09 » Dec 6th, '09, 18:20

That was nice, had a good flow to it, decent usuage of multies (which helped it flow :sweating: ).
Image
"Believe me, BET and MTV
Are gonna grieve when we leave, dawg fo sheezy
Can't leave rap alone the game needs me"
User avatar
AOBrien09
Trailer Trash
Trailer Trash
 
Posts: 428
Joined: Mar 30th, '09, 21:51
Location: England
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby BILI » Dec 6th, '09, 19:47

Wow dope drop from you Solace,muties were good,flow was awesome,and you got good vocab,I can feel this man nice stuff

wanna return feed
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=73356
Image
User avatar
BILI
Pill Popper
Pill Popper
 
Posts: 9998
Joined: Mar 26th, '09, 16:05
Location: Croatia
Gender: Male

Re: That's Just How It Ends

Postby Solace » Dec 8th, '09, 00:15

Thanks you 3, much appreciation for the love :worship:
Image
User avatar
Solace
Bad Influence
Bad Influence
 
Posts: 19901
Joined: Apr 25th, '08, 03:12
Gender: Male

Next

Return to Creative Writing



Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users