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I'ma Get You (unfinished)

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Re: I'ma Get You (unfinished)

Postby MC Anonymous » Dec 6th, '09, 00:14

LMFAOOOOOO Damn a different side of Scotty I aint see before.
Story telling is dope as hell, like the rhyming, could have been better.
structure/flow was marvelous, didn't slip up once for me.
I liked the imagery but it could have been more detailed.
Good job bro, finish it. :y:
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Re: I'ma Get You (unfinished)

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 6th, '09, 05:39

Yeah man that flow was pretty dead on. I wanna see it finished man. And lol at the chorus
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: I'ma Get You (unfinished)

Postby BILI » Dec 6th, '09, 18:46

Nice job man,I really like it,flow was awesome,some nice rhymes 2 :y:
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