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Me, Lyrical? Nah, But I'll Try...

Postby Solace » Dec 8th, '09, 00:14

Been a longgg while since I tried writing like this.

Yo, I stay swift, Matrix, realistic lyrics, yours are looking painted,
You're full of fake shit, you practically took that page to waste it,
You suck, just face it, if you were amazing by now you'd be famous,
Your lyrics is the same shit as the dump I had taken..yesterday,
You fuck around with me, you'll obviously be the next to pay,
I just take this AK and let it spray, I'm a rebel, a dick, a renegade,
And the better way to solve this is my teeth, fuck some metal blades,
Reading that just got your head severed, eh? I'm ripping this,
Take off ya pants, no need for no homo...'Cause I just exposed ya clitoris,
Little bitch, you say that I'm wack? We'll see if you're fearing this,
When I cut up ya pussy until it looks like you had your period,
So do you remember me? No? Then Ill sever these eleven teens,
And staple they faces on ya forehead until it's stuck to ya memory.
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Re: Me, Lyrical? Nah, But I'll Try...

Postby PlayWryte » Dec 8th, '09, 00:26

i'm feeling it, niice multies, like where you were going wit it, keep up
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Re: Me, Lyrical? Nah, But I'll Try...

Postby Edge » Dec 8th, '09, 00:27

i like it
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: Me, Lyrical? Nah, But I'll Try...

Postby DƎRDYPK » Dec 8th, '09, 00:28

Damn :worship:
that's some very dope MC'ing there Solace :smoking:
my favorite part was

Solace wrote:Little bitch, you say that I'm wack? We'll see if you're fearing this,
When I cut up ya pussy until it looks like you had your period,


idk why but it made me lol ;)
good job bro :y:
keep them crazy bars coming :b:
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Re: Me, Lyrical? Nah, But I'll Try...

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 8th, '09, 00:39

Decent verse, but your vocabulary could be expanded as well as your complexity lyrically. Yes, you have multi-syllabic rhyming, but the words you use to rhyme sound too basic.

And it sounds like you're biting Slim Shady for several lines. :unsure:

But overall, it was a nice verse. :y:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Me, Lyrical? Nah, But I'll Try...

Postby Noeezy » Dec 8th, '09, 00:40

Reading that just got your head severed, eh? I'm ripping this,
Take off ya pants, no need for no homo...'Cause I just exposed ya clitoris


hahaha nice shit
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Re: Me, Lyrical? Nah, But I'll Try...

Postby Solace » Dec 8th, '09, 00:44

Thanks guys :)

@Chet Starr, I was going to write something personal but then I'm like Fuck that I do that too much so I tried just going back to a certain style I used a while back..Thanks again.
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Re: Me, Lyrical? Nah, But I'll Try...

Postby bullet_boy46 » Dec 8th, '09, 00:54

shit :o
Solace wrote:Oh stop your making me blush :blinking:

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Re: Me, Lyrical? Nah, But I'll Try...

Postby Solace » Dec 15th, '09, 02:48

Thanks i guess..
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