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Postby J Roc » Dec 9th, '09, 02:02

This girl i knew ... i Called her Shawty. She had good look's .. With An Awesome Body
One Day, She Talked To Roccy ... We "Both Went Down" .. Like a Kamikaze
She Told Me how She Wanted Doggy, Right After She "Flashed Me"..Like the Paparazzi
Honest to God She Didn't Want Condom's On Me... And Her Current Life Was On The Rockies
I Fell For Her, She was Constant Calling.. But We Was Always Close, Like Walkie Talkie's
Something she did, Brought me Down To Earth .... No Respect Left, I Just Clown On her
Winner's Weepers, Cuz i Found Her First ... Make's me regret the day i went Down on her
If Truth Be Told, She Lied Alot ... Got me embarrased to the point where i'm signing off
Everything i said, i Tried to Talk .... Now i got this pain from her Tylenol
I Noticed That, She Likes My Cock.. She has the key to my heart, but can't Find the lock

I'm no where near whut i used to be. Fuckkkkkkkkkkkk.
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Re: Your biggest fan.

Postby Emadyville » Dec 9th, '09, 02:10

Yeah I agree, I liked the kamikaze line tho, keep writin man :y:
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Re: Your biggest fan.

Postby Robbie G » Dec 9th, '09, 02:42

I thought it was nice man.

I could kinda picture this over jay-z's venus vs. mars beat.
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Re: Your biggest fan.

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 9th, '09, 03:33

Yeah was better punches than anyone here still though fam. I think you might be the only cat who could write a love note with mad punches. Hahaha good shit son, kamakaze line was sick
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Re: Your biggest fan.

Postby lilrossy » Dec 9th, '09, 14:24

Robbie G wrote:I could kinda picture this over jay-z's venus vs. mars beat.

i was thinkin the same thing when i was reading it.

it was alright , nothing special. besides that one line, nothing really stood out. still, i liked it. keep writing. :happy:
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Re: Your biggest fan.

Postby Solace » Dec 9th, '09, 23:12

i thought it was pretty dope
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Re: Your biggest fan.

Postby Nimbus_9 » Dec 9th, '09, 23:41

pretty cool how you used punches in a drop like this, i liked the story line, pretty cool stuff :y:
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