Insomnious

[Spyder]

song named after my album, and one of the only shit tracking tracks on there. figured id give you guys an update on what im workin one. Feedback of course, hope you like it

This is, the shit that I consider my business
So come get wit, me to come and see or witness
Runnin laps over rappers please that be my fitness
G you wanna spit wit, me you need defenses.
When I cock n’ aim that guns got lots of strays
No time to stop and prey, no blockin the pain
Todays not your day, I got on top of the game
Droppin names, tryin to cop with the fame
But I cant seem to shed the most obnoxious of ways
The things that make me the way I got to this day.
But the plot still remains, every drop in my veins
I got hot for game, so im not stoppin or droppin my name.
Lyrical spirit, shit you hear it ima poltergeist
Exorcist I control your life, so now I own your rights.
I show new heights never seen I got the flow you like
I go to write, my vocals light
The pad, my bad that’s how I broke the mic.
Im sober, white and pissed so you know I fight
Explodin right as soon as rappers go to bite.
The prototype, the original bastard
Spillin em faster than the fuckin illest of masters

Hook(X2)
See I cant sleep, so I take pills
Enough of em I might just get killed
So give me my meds, and send me off to bed
Cause if you don’t the insomniac will.

You feel it, heart attack when I start the track
Rip apart your back known as the cardiac.
Wheres the party at, fat ass wanna call me whack
Insomniac got hungry raps, shit im starvin jack.
I got text in my saliva, who next to wanna try some
Dictionary on my lips kiss me you might just die son.
Your style aint ill its sick at best so don’t disrespect
Hit you 1,2 so you die from my second hand like cigarettes.
I see these rappers runnin well im here to out step
All your raw dogs I just turned into house pets.
I found this niche in which I keep people astounded
With the same fuckin words that got me grounded.
Oh shit the cuckoo’s missin locked in my voodoo prison
Insomnious… its what you thought was superstition
My cries open your eyes like you were new to vision
I make MC’s stop, like you forgot who you was dissin.
I add somein to this game, you just got division
So you better cut it short like your words got circumcision.
Im not quite there yet but you bastards wait
When I quit this rappin game, shit that’s the day
I skip lickin a chick to stay home and masturbate.

Hook(X4)
See I cant sleep, so I take pills
Enough of em I might just get killed
So give me my meds, and send me off to bed
Cause if you don’t the insomniac will.

[Relapse.LP]

Great usage of multi-syllabic rhyming, as would be expected of someone like you.

The hook kinda faltered a bit, especially with the mention if "pills". Seems too unoriginal in places and not exactly the freshest content or wording or style, but overall still great.

[Yah-hah]

Yeah agree chorus was iffy but song was dope. It's about time I see you down her in the slums lol

[gutawafang]

I don't like the chorus much. But the overall verses was fire.

Constant multis man.

I got text in my saliva, who next to wanna try some
Dictionary on my lips kiss me you might just die son.
FAVOURITE LINE.

[Spyder]

thanks guys

yea i was kinda rummagin for a hook and im doing a sing-song feel to it
so i didnt want it to be hard lol

@LP, i get what your saying and though yea it seems that way cause of Em and Can both doing sleep pills. the album is Insomnious so i had to do something about that

but thanks for the feedback both of you

keep it coming

[classthe_king]

Haha dang this was dope. The multis were insane. Reading it on paper the flow seemed weird and i couldn't really follow it, but i bet its good with the beat.

[Solace]

I actually liked the chorus...I had it sung and flowed in a specific way in my mind and it just sounded awesome lol. Verses were fire man. And yeah about you before saying our rhyming style is similiar, I def. agree on that . Great shit man cant wait on Insomnious

[Nimbus_9]

Chorus was okay minus the pills part

verses were all tight in rhyming and structured well, that hard content is not of my liking, idk, using the word G and talking about shooting, check it at the door next time

at least it was skillfully done good job man

[Spyder]

thanks for the feed everyone

[Spyder]

bump

[BILI]

Its really good man,It flowed nice,rhymes and multies were awesome ,and I liked the hook,the topic on it reminds me of Ems latest work(wit pills,meds and stuff)overall dope man,
You gonna do an audio of this?if so I`ll be glad to hear it

I`d appreciate it if you check my latest drop
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=73356

[Emadyville]

I don't like the chorus much. But the overall verses was fire.

Constant multis man.

I got text in my saliva, who next to wanna try some
Dictionary on my lips kiss me you might just die son.
FAVOURITE LINE.

I had to quote this cause that line stood out for me too.

Rhymes were insane, for a shit talking track, this was def great to read

[Spyder]

thanks bro