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Native Pride

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 9th, '09, 15:09

Sorry it's a bit long. Went on one of them rants again and wrote WAY too much. cut it down to 4 verses. Got more Native stuff coming soon, plus a collab with Zu so be on the lookout. Just wanna say please read it all the way. Don't just read a few parts then say it was good but later question how I rap. Hope yall enjoy. Wrote it over Atmosphere's Rhyme Slayers beat.


I'm thirsty but unworthy of the US's water,
Cause the Jew's new expert's been altered,
By New Mexican fathers and Souix medicine doctors,
We would call our God's on you but America doesn't fear dirt like it wasn't of clear worth,
So they gave my people a new home as if we wasn't here first,
I seer worse than a clear burst of Nuclear rays near Earth,
I need gas with a match and a casket to match quick to fix a troubled man,
I THINK I USED TO MUCH MUSCLE AND MY OUCH KNUCKLES JAMMED WHEN I FINALLY SCALPED UNCLE SAM AND LEFT HIM OUT FOR A SUMMER TAN!!!!!!!,
And that was just one person's hand,
Native prides not reserved it's earned by those who deserve it by being fast quick and hard to stop,
If you ever killed me out my last ripped palm with drop a glass tipped tomahawk

This prison I live in is the only story I know,
My past is full so unlaughable and it's gory I know,
I'm punched in my face but I no longer feel the way that it hurts,
Cause I've been slaughtered and massacred since the day of my birth

I'm unsure of where to start nor do I know when to finish,
I'll be the last to admit this world's actions so wicked,
Clappin like bitches it's only half of the sickness,
Half is the witness the other half is my focus,
My hocus pocus locust are so swift,
You know this evil I speak of, it's been swept under the rug,
You know the people I be of, it's been left asunder, the blood,
I will no longer allow my words to become victim to this rhythm,
I'm livin the witness to herion and American terrorism,
I will never allow my words to become subject,
To this fuckfest of lust best known as success,
I dream so soundly and I scream words loudly,
Bloody past worst, these things hurt, proudly,
I'm unable to contain this beast within me any longer,
Keep re-breakin my ribs how does this make me any stronger,
FUCK YOU you can take all of my ribs while I'm rappin in 3-D,
It's happenin we see, how blastin all of these things as I'm rappin in my teepee,
Oh he said teepee, haha heehee, Like we,
Are running around chasing buffaloes on horses,
I must know the distortions as I puff smoke's contortions,
Like cut-throat abortions I find the first thread of life and smash it's skull,
I fill my cup with white man's blood until at last it's full,

This prison I live in is the only story I know,
My past is full so unlaughable and it's gory I know,
I'm punched in my face but I no longer feel the way that it hurts,
Cause I've been slaughtered and massacred since the day of my birth

I'm zoning off these stereotypes I find my stereo by,
Running full speed to my home like there he goes, bye,
With Red Cloud bumpin on the speakers I seek silence and read her,
Last words, this last curse as I beat her,
They give me money and shitty land and I'm fine with neither,
I rhyme with heat worse than primal creatures,
Like I still used knives and cleavers to turn out your eyes and leave your,
Bones and skin opened then fingers used as sinus tweesers,
I rhyme with either extreme hate or extreme faith,
That these mean days mean fate is nearing the scheme's weight,
I'm lookin at this tattoo scribbled on her back,
Wondering it's meaning as I scribble on my pad,
"Native Pride" I've learned to wait and hide,
But fuck that, I hate this guy my only wish to take his life,
So much hate inside I take his life and break it twice,
I'm just fakin nice, I hate each state of deep faith that we make,
Like now I have to watch my "weak races" belief states on replay?

This prison I live in is the only story I know,
My past is full so unlaughable and it's gory I know,
I'm punched in my face but I no longer feel the way that it hurts,
Cause I've been slaughtered and massacred since the day of my birth

Now I lie down I'm too weak to continue this journey,
To continue this hurting this venue's not working,
So with closed eyes I'm pondering the hell in here,
Stepping into the footprints on this trail of tears,
I fail to fear since I took death by the throat,
Ever since I gripped his destined soul and he requested hope,
Like he didn't read this molested flow that on his chest was sown,
Unless it's shown I have mercy than I'll allow white man's workings to hurt me,
I'm working on third string to make this earning work see,
I'm typing a bit slower now, my thoughts more reserved,
I'm more concerned that that you forced me to live with my fortune heard,
I'm a tortured bird whose scrounging the surrounding scorched Earth,
I want you to just show me one single person whose made it,
Escaped the death on my rez left redder than my face is,
I'm wasted like shit, show me an indian who isn't,
I'm just being harvested though my garnishes to fill me in this prison,
I was born already inside my casket with the door nailed atop me,
They gave me a trail of tears so all they get is a trail of bodies,
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Native Pride

Postby D'Leh » Dec 9th, '09, 18:11

holy shit man!!! this shit was awesome, the concept, the flow was on point damn!!!
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Re: Native Pride

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 9th, '09, 21:14

Thanks homie. Yeah I think one of my best flow wise. Good lookin out homie
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Native Pride

Postby BILI » Dec 9th, '09, 22:02

Its awesome homie,you write dope stuff,nice rhyming,flow was dope 2,hook was ok,coulda been better,first verse is fuckin excellent,you kept it dope thru whole song,awesome job man :y: :y:

I seer worse than a clear burst of Nuclear rays near Earth,
I need gas with a match and a casket to match quick to fix a troubled man,
I THINK I USED TO MUCH MUSCLE AND MY OUCH KNUCKLES JAMMED WHEN I FINALLY SCALPED UNCLE SAM AND LEFT HIM OUT FOR A SUMMER TAN!!!!!!!,
Loved this part :worship:
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Re: Native Pride

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 9th, '09, 22:05

^ mY favorite part too lol. Thanks big homie
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Native Pride

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 9th, '09, 23:29

That third verse was fuckin crazy dude...omg dude I could sense the emotion in this piece...I think this is my favorite piece by you cause dude it like sums up your race and culture and its just crazy how you delivered it....good shit jus
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Re: Native Pride

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 10th, '09, 01:48

Thanks G. Yeah think it might be my favorite song, and the football ones. Cause they are 100% real
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Native Pride

Postby Wic Kid » Dec 10th, '09, 02:23

Once again, Yah proved that he's tha king up in this bitch. Absolutely everything was amazing. Except your flow on some places, but thats okay. Multies were incredible, and the concept is very strong. I can really feel your anger and passion in this song. :b: My favorite verse was the 1st one, and my favorite lines:

"Native Pride" I've learned to wait and hide,
But fuck that, I hate this guy my only wish to take his life,
So much hate inside I take his life and break it twice,
I'm just fakin nice, I hate each state of deep faith that we make,
Like now I have to watch my "weak races" belief states on replay?


Oh, and by the way, thanks for the shoutout
I'll be the last to admit this world's actions so wicked

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Re: Native Pride

Postby Nimbus_9 » Dec 10th, '09, 02:29

wow man that's crazy, you really are the Unseen Hero man, you're a top dog here for sure man :y:

every part of that was nice, I wish I could write a whole song lol
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Re: Native Pride

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 10th, '09, 09:23

Haha yeah wic thats all you lol. Thanks homies. I appreciate it yall.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Native Pride

Postby SajN » Dec 11th, '09, 21:36

Man, this is fucking dope :worship:
I don't know what more to say. There's nothing negative I can point out.



Also, I've read your earlier pieces, but never commented (I apologize), and man, they are fucking dope too! You're seriously one of the best here... after me :shifty:



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Re: Native Pride

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 17th, '09, 08:18

SajN wrote:Man, this is fucking dope :worship:
I don't know what more to say. There's nothing negative I can point out.



Also, I've read your earlier pieces, but never commented (I apologize), and man, they are fucking dope too! You're seriously one of the best here... after me :shifty:



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Woah thank Saj, comment!!!!! lol. Thanks for the love homie
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Native Pride

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 27th, '09, 23:08

:sweating: bumpin
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Native Pride

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 27th, '09, 23:49

Yah-hah wrote::sweating: bumpin

You're back, Yah-hah. :o

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Re: Native Pride

Postby gutawafang » Dec 28th, '09, 05:54

been a long time man.

I see them multis. :worship:

The hook is pretty cool. I sorta feel it.

what's red cloud?
With Red Cloud bumpin on the speakers I seek silence and read her,
I guess it's just a person. haha

This is weird, kinda spoils the piece.
I'm working on third string to make this earning work see,
I'm typing a bit slower now, my thoughts more reserved,

Still I liked it. ;)
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