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Breaking Point

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Breaking Point

Postby classthe_king » Dec 9th, '09, 04:51

Took about 20 minutes. This is the only new thing ive wrote in a long time. Flow will be hard for you to pick up but trust me it works. I was feeling really depressed when i wrote this there isn't alot of multis. This probably won't get fed cause i haven't been feeding other people as much but hopefully ill have more time in the upcoming days.

I think ive finally hit my breaking point
I'm stuck in faults so im about fuck it all and start making joints
Maybe Cody's right it will relieve my depression
Sooth this high irate degree of aggression
And you expect me to believe im your best friend
When you can't even fuckin see im investin
Everything in you, and you can't make it to my game
Myswell take a spear and put it straight into my frame
I don't care if the whole crowd is screamin my name
If you ain't apart of the voice then it ain't even the same
I'm deep in disdain so some people'd say I have a cold heart
Well I have no heart, you don't know so don't start
Both parts of my body, mind and soul
Have been torn in two and born into a blinded stroll
Through a path of lies so I don't always think what I say
But fuck it, you wanna be best friends ill keep it that way

It's like I just got a job on the sun. :smoking:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Breaking Point

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 9th, '09, 05:15

I actualy found the flow kinda easy. Nice rythm and rhyme scheme. Not too complex so it was easier to read than most. I liked it man, bout time you start writing again :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


Nundea Mekeze comin soon May 4th
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Re: Breaking Point

Postby classthe_king » Dec 10th, '09, 00:58

Thanks
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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