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Christmas

Postby AOBrien09 » Dec 12th, '09, 00:44

Fuckin Christmas Is Near Again, An Am Just Able To Afford Present's Again,
In Comparison Am Broke Like Econmy An The State It's In, A Whore's Presence Man
Is Not What A Need Right Now, Stay Focused, Don't Turn To Weed Right Now,
Shit's Not That Hopeless, But My Bitch Is Watching My Heart Bleed Like Woah,
You Just Gon' And Left, Yeah Fucking Happy Christmas And New Year,
But Please Excuse Is, If A Ain't Feeling The Christmas Cheer, Am'a Scrooge Eh,
Ant's A Feel Like Because Feel Small And Am Being Stepped On, Boss That's Why A Wrecked'Em
Job Now A Gotta Find Me Next One, An The Next Boss Try Not To Disrespect'Em,
Wish San-ta Was Real Cause A Need A Hand'Ta Wrap These Present's Cause The Demand'Ta,
Wrap These Increases, And' Tha, Time Decreases, A Can Barely Stand Huh,
Cause Am Tired And Worn Out, So This Good Cheer A Don't Show An You Enquire Me About,
Is Retired And Been Thrown Out, Am Only Spittin The Truth You Want Lies With No Doubt,
A Can't Do That No Crazy Maniac Shit's At, A Point Where My Emotion's Have Blown,
My Happy Expression In My Throat-Gone, An Am Coping With A Sad Tone,

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Re: Christmas

Postby Just Silver » Dec 12th, '09, 01:27

Flow wasnt too good and setup with words themselves were'nt too original its great to see some christmas writing but this was depressing

overall 7/10
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