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Postby Fa-Q » Dec 12th, '09, 22:16

Well I'm working on story telling and this is what I cam up with...I'm not in love with the chorus like I always am


I walk into science class, and start fuckin the plastic skeleton,
Stir a vat of hydrocloric acid, and well fell in,
No ones helpin me out, as my bodies burnin to crisp,
Punch some fat kids front teeth, and tried to discern a lisp,
Stick my dick in a cunts mouth, who just learned to kiss,
I feel a shadow, and here comes a girl to follow,
I fill a beaker with cum, make her swirl and swallow,
My next stop is the girls bathroom,
It looks like one of the cunts took a dump,
And round and round swirls half a broom,
Take a roll a toilet paper, and wrapped myself mummy style,
Then took a shit on the bathroom floor, all over the crummy tile,
Take a shit in the stall, and don't flush,
Rip the cheeks off a teen girl, that won't blush,
Dildo fuck that cunt, while I give her the swirly of her life,
"This is for not going out with me gurly, yer my wife,"
Before I leave the bathroom, wash my hands,
Drank twelve cans of red bull, until my heads full,
The toss the cans, but it cost my plans,


(Chorus)
I plan to fuck that big tittied, hot teacher,
Extension 412, no matter what I've got to reach her,
Moon that perverted janitor, but he enjoys it,
Pulls his cock out, and with pliers, toys it,
Yank the curls, and spank the girls, that wouldn't go out with me,
For the times, I said I had a three inch dick, they doubted me,
Its the last day of school, but no matter what I have to stay cool,
The principal tomorrow, but today I rule, this gay school,


Go to the lunch room, with a "Derek" name tag,
Eat a sandwich, then but some weed with the same bag,
Make sure I get a meal ticket, squish a teal cricket,
Then once four of its legs off, I take my heel, and kick it,
I get up on one of the tables, "Attention, those with A-D-D,
I'm subtracted all you fuckers, and I might mention, I may be free,
In about six to seven months,
Its a co-ed jail, who knows, I might hit eleven cunts,
In the lip, until their lips look like Angie Jolie,
And Mandy and Khloe, Kardashian, wants hers done,
Come on ma, these two cunts deserve one--,"
Just then this retarded kid walks in, wearin a leopard print thong,
He's got an erection bent sideways, its bent wrong,
He kicks me in the nuts, and one splatters,
Like he gives a fuck if my son matters,
I said bitch, why you laughin, then snipped his balls off,
Took two nails, I just happen to have, nail to the wall soft,
He said "whi, ar' yoo duing thes," so I glued his hands together,
Now since I've planned them, my plans are better,


I plan to fuck that big tittied, hot teacher,
Extension 412, no matter what I've got to reach her,
Moon that perverted janitor, but he enjoys it,
Pulls his cock out, and with pliers, toys it,
Yank the curls, and spank the girls, that wouldn't go out with me,
For the times, I said I had a three inch dick, they doubted me,
Its the last day of school, but no matter what I have to stay cool,
The principal tomorrow, but today I rule, this gay school,


Went out, and punched my way into the ladies gym class,
Jackin off, screamin "This is for all the times I looked at Lynn's ass,
So I again ask, "How many cunts are horny,
Even though, I've already jacked off once this morning,"
"Bitch I'll have you by the locker room, wear your school uniform,
Fuck you while your doing laps,
And the water in the pool will be soon warm,
All of it is now officially "white waters,"
So parents, whatever you do, hide your daughters,"
Grounds keeper Willy, pluggin your daughters snatch with a bitch cork,
then poppin her fifteen year old breast plants, with a pitchfork,
Grabbed a fork, and tried to take a bite outta them breast plant,
His mouth and throat can take it, but his chest can't,
This is all transpires, my hands tires,
Cause I'm yankin off, so much that the tip of my dick,
Feels like a candle, if you strip the wick,
Or like if a pussy just had its period, and you let a crip lick,
Lick the wound, goddamn, I'm starting to sound retarded,
I find a flint, and some fire supplies, I know I'm bound to start it,


I plan to fuck that big tittied, hot teacher,
Extension 412, no matter what I've got to reach her,
Moon that perverted janitor, but he enjoys it,
Pulls his cock out, and with pliers, toys it,
Yank the curls, and spank the girls, that wouldn't go out with me,
For the times, I said I had a three inch dick, they doubted me,
Its the last day of school, but no matter what I have to stay cool,
The principal tomorrow, but today I rule, this gay school,
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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby BILI » Dec 12th, '09, 23:22

Its nice man,flowed good,rhymes were ok 2,some dope multies,storytelling was awesome :y:
and I think people`ll like it cause they can relate,we all know how its in school :y:
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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Dazed » Dec 12th, '09, 23:25

Good shit yo, love it.
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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 13th, '09, 00:27

Thanks BILI and dazed
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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 13th, '09, 00:42

It has multies, but the subject content is horrendously similar to Slim Shady's.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 13th, '09, 00:51

Relapse.LP wrote:It has multies, but the subject content is horrendously similar to Slim Shady's.

One mans opinion...thanks for the feed though....and has he ever done a song about the last day of school?
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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 13th, '09, 05:24

I'm startin to hate the chorus...it just sounds like one of the verses...I hate comin up with hooks
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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Just Silver » Dec 13th, '09, 05:35

i also find my self thinking these kind of sick sex thoughts when im in school lol

liked it but if it wasn't a story i could see this being better
like if the guidelines were looser

but overall i liked it alot

props on a school story
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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 13th, '09, 06:38

Fa-Q wrote:
Relapse.LP wrote:It has multies, but the subject content is horrendously similar to Slim Shady's.

One mans opinion...thanks for the feed though....and has he ever done a song about the last day of school?

He's talked about all these disturbing sexual thoughts before.

The general content: you know what I'm talking about. Don't twist it.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 13th, '09, 07:10

Yea I know Relapse but I am different from Em
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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 13th, '09, 07:32

Thanks Chet and yea I enjoy writing songs like that more than songs like this...thanks for the constructive criticism...and you just checkin up on people shit just to make sure your name isn't uttered...haha
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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 13th, '09, 07:58

Haha thanks Chet...and to quote the biggest douche in Hip Hop history, Game - "I don't take shots at legends" or in this case mods that can get me banned...lol good looking out Chet
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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 13th, '09, 08:44

TR ain't a democracy. :staticsmoking:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby macdaddy019967 » Dec 13th, '09, 09:05

wow flow is awesome i liked the chorus too very catchy shit here man :y:
would like to hear this on audio though
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Re: Fa-Q - Last Day of School (Story Telling)

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 13th, '09, 22:29

Thanks Big mac
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