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Postby classthe_king » Dec 13th, '09, 03:13

ehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh :confusion:

Yo, this goes out to all the soldiers gone
It goes out to Coleon I only hope that your holding on
This lonely song has solely spawned an anger and it doesn’t change
Cause I hold onto emotions like a cactus covets rain
I used to treat rappers like a soldier in this fuckin game
But now I see the only soldier is my cousin Wayne
He's my hero, the one that I always looked up to
Most of my hobbies were his that I took up through
Wayne is the one who guided me in my life
The one who no matter what provided me wit advice
But when we divided, see it implies that my passion was scarred
But it was for the better when he joined the national guard
The irrational part was I never told him the truth
Cause now that hes in Japan I don’t know what to do
Do you know what it's like to have that implodin through you
When your spittin heat but it still feels so cold in the booth
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Soldier

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 13th, '09, 03:28

Pretty good drop...I like the Cactus covets rain line...that was dope
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Re: Soldier

Postby Emadyville » Dec 13th, '09, 04:33

Fa-Q wrote:I like the Cactus covets rain line...that was dope


Yeah dope line, very emotional I def liked this, good work :y:
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Re: Soldier

Postby Solace » Dec 13th, '09, 04:52

Real nice drop Class. Haven't read shit from you in a while. Flow was nice...Multies held shit together well. Concept was dope. Nice overall.
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Re: Soldier

Postby BILI » Dec 13th, '09, 16:20

Nice flow,rhymes and multies were dope 2,I liked the beginning most

Yo, this goes out to all the soldiers gone
It goes out to Coleon I only hope that your holding on
This lonely song has solely spawned an anger and it doesn’t change
Cause I hold onto emotions like a cactus covets rain


Check my new song if you want to
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Re: Soldier

Postby Nimbus_9 » Dec 13th, '09, 16:31

classthe_king wrote:ehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh :confusion:

Yo, this goes out to all the soldiers gone
It goes out to Coleon I only hope that your holding on
This lonely song has solely spawned an anger and it doesn’t change
Cause I hold onto emotions like a cactus covets rain
I used to treat rappers like a soldier in this fuckin game
But now I see the only soldier is my cousin Wayne
He's my hero, the one that I always looked up to
Most of my hobbies were his that I took up through
Wayne is the one who guided me in my life
The one who no matter what provided me wit advice
But when we divided, see it implies that my passion was scarred
But it was for the better when he joined the national guard
The irrational part was I never told him the truth
Cause now that hes in Japan I don’t know what to do
Do you know what it's like to have that implodin through you
When your spittin heat but it still feels so cold in the booth


lol what was the ehhhh for?

and i thought it was okay, good content to it, subject matter was on point, nothing bad worth mentioning, so Coleon was here and left or whatever, but who's Wayne
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Re: Soldier

Postby Solace » Dec 13th, '09, 17:48

Nimbus_9 wrote:
classthe_king wrote:ehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh :confusion:

Yo, this goes out to all the soldiers gone
It goes out to Coleon I only hope that your holding on
This lonely song has solely spawned an anger and it doesn’t change
Cause I hold onto emotions like a cactus covets rain
I used to treat rappers like a soldier in this fuckin game
But now I see the only soldier is my cousin Wayne
He's my hero, the one that I always looked up to
Most of my hobbies were his that I took up through
Wayne is the one who guided me in my life
The one who no matter what provided me wit advice
But when we divided, see it implies that my passion was scarred
But it was for the better when he joined the national guard
The irrational part was I never told him the truth
Cause now that hes in Japan I don’t know what to do
Do you know what it's like to have that implodin through you
When your spittin heat but it still feels so cold in the booth


lol what was the ehhhh for?

and i thought it was okay, good content to it, subject matter was on point, nothing bad worth mentioning, so Coleon was here and left or whatever, but who's Wayne

Lil Wayne obviously. :whistle:

But now I see the only soldier is my cousin Wayne
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Re: Soldier

Postby Nimbus_9 » Dec 13th, '09, 18:40

Solace wrote:
Nimbus_9 wrote:
classthe_king wrote:ehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh :confusion:

Yo, this goes out to all the soldiers gone
It goes out to Coleon I only hope that your holding on
This lonely song has solely spawned an anger and it doesn’t change
Cause I hold onto emotions like a cactus covets rain
I used to treat rappers like a soldier in this fuckin game
But now I see the only soldier is my cousin Wayne
He's my hero, the one that I always looked up to
Most of my hobbies were his that I took up through
Wayne is the one who guided me in my life
The one who no matter what provided me wit advice
But when we divided, see it implies that my passion was scarred
But it was for the better when he joined the national guard
The irrational part was I never told him the truth
Cause now that hes in Japan I don’t know what to do
Do you know what it's like to have that implodin through you
When your spittin heat but it still feels so cold in the booth


lol what was the ehhhh for?

and i thought it was okay, good content to it, subject matter was on point, nothing bad worth mentioning, so Coleon was here and left or whatever, but who's Wayne

Lil Wayne obviously. :whistle:

But now I see the only soldier is my cousin Wayne


:angry: no shit

I was wondering if he was a guy on here as well
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