My Bloody Wedding

[BILI]

Intro:
*female screams"
Devil voice:
Hahahaha
Here I go

Hook:2x
(Singin it wit dark voice)
Woho my bloody wedding ohoh
My bloody wedding,you wont forget it,my bloody wedding come n` check it
My bloody wedding come and you`ll get it,my bloody wedding you`ll regret it.
Woho my bloody wedding ohoh

Verse 1:
I`m standing in front of my fucking mirror in my room,spraying some perfume
Putting on this damn costume,when the bells ring my darling`ll come outa tomb
I was a bit nervous how will this go,should I just give her a kiss,woah
A voice in my head said hell no,someone from our wedding crowd yelled "he`s slow"
When I heard the bells I went out,fuckin crowd was full of weird people,no doubt
Some of them were deformed,I wanted to run away,but I couldn`t go without
My love,oh man its ok,there, shes coming,you could only hear bees humming
Oh but damn,man I was so fuckin terrified of that what she`s becoming
At first I thought she`ll kill me,but next minute I knew that I aint dying yet
It was my fuckin time for paying debt,at that point I knew I`m marrying Death

Hook:2x
(Singin it wit dark voice)
Woho my bloody wedding ohoh
My bloody wedding,you wont forget it,my bloody wedding come n` check it
My bloody wedding come and you`ll get it,my bloody wedding you`ll regret it.
Woho my bloody wedding ohoh

Verse 2:
See,we already went on our honey moon,now I got money to burn
We killed people,laughed to dismembered people,it was like in a funny cartoon
She gave me the power to clone myself,like a metotic division
Try to fuckin attack me and it will be your last heroic decision
I met devil,he was like my genetically identical twin
If you kill me now it`ll look like a poetically theoretical win
Cause I cannot die,just come wit me and I`ll show you my colt forty-five
It`ll even make Fifty Cent die,now man say to your fifty percent bye
Devil says:"BILI what da fuck are you doing??You went off topic,come back
Why are you talkin bout fuckin gun attacks,when you can spread dumb plagues"

Hook:2x
(Singin it wit dark voice)
Woho my bloody wedding ohoh
My bloody wedding,you wont forget it,my bloody wedding come n` check it
My bloody wedding come and you`ll get it,my bloody wedding you`ll regret it.
Woho my bloody wedding ohoh

Verse 3:
I just wanna let you know that its been three years since my wedding wit death
Now I`m more diabolic,just look at me and you`ll be breathing without breath
And then you`ll be ending wit death,seems like I somehow live without heart
You question my deeds?but you can`t doubt art,I`ll show you,sit I`m bout to start
My magnificent work,wait a sec,first I need to find a decent clerk
I`ll just come to him with my chainsaw and yell:"come and get a present,jerk"
My chainsaw`s diabolic too,its equipped wit souls from people I killed before
If my body needs blood it`ll be refilled wit more,Am I skilled as before?
Sure I am,I feel like a killing machine,and no one`s fucking wit me
If you meet me and my wife,you`ll wonder why`s your luck in captivity


Feed plz,and structures are perfect

[classthe_king]

Pretty good story telling man. That wedding got out of hand quick Rhymes were average. But try to make your lines shorty, i couldnt really find a flow to it. If you try writing to a beat then it will help your flow alot

[BILI]

^^thx man

[BILI]

bumpin this bitch

[Fa-Q]

Pretty good imagery...liked it, buuut wasn't feeling the chorus...too much like 3 am for me but do what you want man...good drop tho

[BILI]

Pretty good imagery...liked it, buuut wasn't feeling the chorus...too much like 3 am for me but do what you want man...good drop tho

thx man

[D'Leh]

Great Story Telling BIILIMAN, a great piece of poetry!!!! flowed really well, great structure i love this drop!!!

if you wanna peep Check my last drop - Like That

[macdaddy019967]

not bad ur improving
*still waiting for u to post up the collab with my 4 bars*

[Solace]

Could barely flow with it...You seemed like you were trying extremely hard to rhyme. All verses were bad in terms of rhyming... Eg.

Devil says:"BILI what da fuck are you doing??You went off topic,come back
Why are you talkin bout fuckin gun attacks,when you can spread dumb plagues"

Comeback...Gun attacks..Dumb plagues...What??

She gave me the power to clone myself,like a metotic division
Try to fuckin attack me and it will be your last heroic decision
I met devil,he was like my genetically identical twin
If you kill me now it`ll look like a poetically theoretical win

Uhh..What?? You have a twin, so killing you would look like a poetically theoretical win? What the fuck are you trying to say man? That is SO forced. This, this is a piece I really havent liked from you BILI in terms of rhymes and flow though it had a nice concept to it. You had nice imagery and concept, but other than that...Didnt impress.