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Forget It

Postby FAME » Dec 13th, '09, 20:17

Sometimes I just really don’t understand
Your attention to change the situation I now command
I’m threw and over this stuff I’m done
I won’t let you keep crying in front of your son
I won’t let the other half walk out the door
I wonder if you’re a man because you only ignore
Both of you are fucked up and crazy
I’m tired of being the most mature ya’ll are lazy
I saw my dad just walk out
I wonder if he is going to come back now
Where the fuck you going?
Running away? Your true colors are showing!
I’m threw with this life
But I won’t grab the knife
I have too much to live for
But I won’t let you ignore it no more!
I need you to grow a spine
Stand up and do your line
I’m still a kid and I’m more mature than you
You give up and act like your through
But I won’t grow up like you
I’ll learn from you too
I’ll tell my brother that I love him
Because otherwise acting like you….his chances are slim

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I really don't want any feedback to help my rhymes, I wrote them as just small ones on purpose. I'm mad, and I had to get this out of me. gah
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Re: Forget It

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 13th, '09, 20:49

Did you not want any feed at all...I'm sorry if you didn't...I liked it
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Re: Forget It

Postby FAME » Dec 14th, '09, 02:07

Nah I was fine with feedback, I just didn't want, oh those are simple rhymes! Because I know they are. Thanks :)
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Re: Forget It

Postby gutawafang » Dec 14th, '09, 04:22

Relevant rhymes. :y:
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Re: Forget It

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Dec 14th, '09, 17:18

Love it! So emotinal! Have more like that...
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

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Re: Forget It

Postby FAME » Dec 15th, '09, 00:53

Thanks for all the feedback, I was mad about this so I had to write something. I think I just got back the spark to write, more from me to come soon. :)
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