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D.O.N. - You Better Know

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Re: D.O.N. - You Better Know

Postby classthe_king » Dec 13th, '09, 16:27

Rhyming was great on this. It just made everything sound dope. I probably liked the first four lines the best. Keep at it.
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Re: D.O.N. - You Better Know

Postby BILI » Dec 14th, '09, 14:19

This was dope man,I liked the rhymes and it flowed ok,keep at it :y:


and if you want more feed,you need to feed other peoples drops :flower:
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Re: D.O.N. - You Better Know

Postby Boston » Dec 14th, '09, 19:16

for some reason i was getting hyped just cuz of the way you wrote it (i dont know seemed like you have experience/battle, shit just a guess) iuno. the structure was there for the most part, the punchlines seemed a tad fit forced at times because to me it seemed like a battling type piece. its still a good piece.
like the little parts between. the chorus is good :y: peep my new verse '
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Re: D.O.N. - You Better Know

Postby Vettori » Dec 14th, '09, 19:52

She prays and Wonders~Messiah's being; I just bring the Thunder,~The~Fire... /
...as I "cruise down the street in my '64" and crush her skull Under~The~Tires //

i liked that haha, Maybe coulda been said better.... but its probably cause of how im reading it, but enjoyed the

Crush her skull under the tires part haha, Good Lines man
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