im tryin to up my multi use a little, what ya think?

by **Edge** » Dec 14th, '09, 23:28

this is multi-mania, how insane are ya
im brainier, than the fame of ya
eatin hookers labias, always gettin lazier
ppl get to cravin ya, and than its all downhill
comit unsound kills, when i down pills
im so backwards i drown gills
i abound thrills, with my sound skills
when i get weed, the pounds ill
this is pure talent, no studio magic
if u dont believe me, meet my automatic
i spray sporadic, im a gun adict
dont act spastic, or ul get blasted
u basterd, i swear to god ul get plastered
this is pure crafted, never scrap drafted
im white, im used to gettin laughed at
thats why i know where the ski mask at
and the gat bat and poison gas is
all by my side, ready to leave u gashed, kid

by **Boston** » Dec 14th, '09, 23:56

i mean its always good to multi's but all cuz u use multi's, it doesn't necessarily mean it is good. they seemed forced here, and it shows what you tried to do, 'up' your multies. next thing to do is try to make sense with them, make em flow naturally. etc. just take a bunch of words and put it on a paper and try rhyming

Boston
tossed in
lost binge

shit iuno u know wat i mean

by **tjb** » Dec 15th, '09, 00:05

no good

by **macdaddy019967** » Dec 15th, '09, 00:09

yea multies were definetly forced
but nice try keep at it :smoking:

by **Nimbus_9** » Dec 15th, '09, 00:21

some of it didn't make sense, that kinda brought it down alot, atleast you are trying to improve, and keep at it man :y:

Website · by **Solace** » Dec 15th, '09, 02:34

It was alright...Keep at it...Multies thought are probably the easiest thing in writing (well imo) so once youve built a nice foundation on it dont forget shit like punches alright?

PS. Dont be pseudo-intellectual either.

by **Nimbus_9** » Dec 15th, '09, 03:09

Solace wrote:It was alright...Keep at it...Multies thought are probably the easiest thing in writing (well imo) so once youve built a nice foundation on it dont forget shit like punches alright?

PS. Dont be pseudo-intellectual either.

saying pseudo-intellectual is pseudo-intellectual in itself lol

Website · by **Solace** » Dec 15th, '09, 03:57

Oh yea? Well...well...

Racism is racist in itself. Pwned.

by **Nimbus_9** » Dec 15th, '09, 05:02

Solace wrote:Oh yea? Well...well...

Racism is racist in itself. Pwned.

Calling your own "PWN" is self "PWNacious" :tounge2:

by **Edge** » Dec 15th, '09, 06:29

appreciate the feedback but honestly it just came to me, i didnt try forcing anything... thanks for ur honesty tho :y:

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