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Another Random Verse

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 15th, '09, 08:05

My hairy nutsack is so mangled and wrinkly,
That it my dick looks like a tangled slinky,
It already looked like two grapes wranglin a pinky,
Met a girl at the new york stock exchange,
Her ex came, but she said your cock is strange,
My fingers beggin, wontchu have sex with us,
They fight to the death, cause I'm ampedexious,
There's so many fuckin sports I scared to take up,
That doesn't make sense like fat girls that wear make up,
I'm nastier then your old ladies casserole,
I'm tighter then a cold babies asshole,
Run butt naked with a machete, through your neighborhood,
Cut your ass up, like I imagine a lightsaber would,
I'm eatin this chowder, these women made,
Now I'm so dehydrated, my piss looks like powder lemonade,
The girls sayin "I wonder how many crimes in my career,
All I know is a vampire eats a girl out,
Twelve times a year,"
I see the girl, and this particular girl's a
nine,
But puttin my dick in her face, Is like castin a pearl before swine,
Yet I thirst for carrie, and first its scary,
Ima vampire round the camp fire,
Trying to burst her cherry,
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Re: Another Random Verse

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 15th, '09, 08:30

Um...

Multies seem natural to you, but really: you like rape and murder that much? :unsure:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Another Random Verse

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 15th, '09, 08:57

Relapse.LP wrote:Um...

Multies seem natural to you, but really: you like rape and murder that much? :unsure:

Lol well this is just whatever...I hardly tried...peep "Never Enough" the song I did with Zu and Spyder and see a song I actually tried on....its a few posts down
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Re: Another Random Verse

Postby Solace » Dec 16th, '09, 02:20

Imo, trying too hard to be Eminem...For real before anything Relapse related came out and people were still thinking about King Mathers/retirement here in CW shit was original...Too much of "I'll lick a clitoris while shitting on a dead baby" type of horrorcore stuff. You got multies and flow down though. But in terms of concept this is pretty bleh. Vocab was alright, nothing special or confusing so I could follow it. So you didn't Canibus out. :y: Keep at it dude :y:

PS. Would you mind checking this out?
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