New Verse.. Personal Type shit. Peep if u can..

[Boston]

well before you read the verse, the 1:16/one sixteen references are to the date me n my girl started goin out a few years ago. 1/16 (january 16) so just some wordplay there..now ull probably understand it better. the more most best shit and babycakes shit is just shit we use to say the words in the ' '. but yeah.. hope yall enjoy


i cant describe the pain, how it is or how i feel/
so every day i sigh n pray n wonder what in life is real/
every way i try n deal, its 1:16, its time that kills/
so every day just one sixteen cuz maybe just my rhyming will/
bring us closer, holding hands, baby im the only man/
who will take his coat n pants, off and in the cold i stand/
freezing just to make you laugh, the reason i just make it past/
all the bullshit, your the reason and i just cant change the fact/
me and you are not together, single n our hearts are hurting/
not a problem we cant fix, fix the ones that arent working/
is it love i think is, one minute calm, the next im nervous/
'more most best' i love you too, you are nothing less than perfect/
in my eyes, your my wife, in disguise, your my life/
your everything, my 'babycakes', when its dark your my light/
close your eyes go back to sleep, its a dream it did no harm/
kiss you on the fore head then you doze back off in my arms/
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[Boston]

thanks scott. i dont know what i plan on doing with that verse though honestly. probably nothing.

[Vettori]

very deep, Flow was incredible Awsome way to keep me reading, hope shit works out for the best... i liked the 1:16 line, very nice, yud like to write at least " one 16 bar verse " i liked how that line turned out.. very clever to include


Hope u record it as well

[D'Leh]

awesome man flowed really well, deep shit i hope you¡ll record this shit, wanna peep my last drop? its called Like That

[Edge]

i like it, most people includingmyself can conncect to it, nice flow too

[Solace]

Real dope Boston..the multies and flow are what usually hook me in and you hooked me if you get what im saying..Had an actual story in it, feel the emotion.

mind returnin feed

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[Boston]

good looks vettori, yeah that 1/16 shit means a lot n i was thinking i could do something clever. but to everyone im not going to record this, and never had the intention to. it just felt like i had to vent cuz i dont vent to people aha so str8 up since i really dont know yall like that i just put it out over here. cuz i was acutally happy with the out come. thank you all for the feed. i will get back to ya.

if any1 else has nethin else to say shitt dont be shy lol

[Boston]

bump

[Xray]

Very very simple rhymes. THe whole personal shit is exaggerated, cause this was hardly personal it was just the average shit you'd see once the word personal is thrown into the mix. Neither did any names or anything real life related was into that, even if you did you did it wrong and it wasnt personal is was on a metaphor basis. On deep tracks, you should be naming the people your talking about, the places, the exact events so it makes it personal and much more appealing for real. Very average.

[Boston]

Very very simple rhymes. THe whole personal shit is exaggerated, cause this was hardly personal it was just the average shit you'd see once the word personal is thrown into the mix. Neither did any names or anything real life related was into that, even if you did you did it wrong and it wasnt personal is was on a metaphor basis. On deep tracks, you should be naming the people your talking about, the places, the exact events so it makes it personal and much more appealing for real. Very average.

thanks for your OPINION. lol. you dont have to name ANYONE to be personal at all. and i did say personal shit in there, all because your not hip to it does not mean it isn't personal. i explained some basic shit in there that was personal. and yeah some was on a metaphor basic, but at the same time they are personal. lol. thank you for your feed tho sir

[Xray]

Very very simple rhymes. THe whole personal shit is exaggerated, cause this was hardly personal it was just the average shit you'd see once the word personal is thrown into the mix. Neither did any names or anything real life related was into that, even if you did you did it wrong and it wasnt personal is was on a metaphor basis. On deep tracks, you should be naming the people your talking about, the places, the exact events so it makes it personal and much more appealing for real. Very average.

thanks for your OPINION. lol. you dont have to name ANYONE to be personal at all. and i did say personal shit in there, all because your not hip to it does not mean it isn't personal. i explained some basic shit in there that was personal. and yeah some was on a metaphor basic, but at the same time they are personal. lol. thank you for your feed tho sir

Whatever bro, take it or leave it.

[Boston]

ohh nah i mean ill remember that next time i write something but im not going to change it drastically. i respect your opinion and shit though.

[Boston]

boston, you write better pieces than him anyway. dno what he's talking about, i could feel that it was personal, easily. and no, you don't have to name places, etc to make it personal lol, personal is feelings, not objects. lol.

lol good looks bro, i respect his opinion n all tho. i aint guna hate on it. if he thinks like that maybe i cud do sutin a lil different next time to please him to, make everybody happy

but ayy its all good no hard feelings

[classthe_king]

I thought this was dope. This part would sound great rapped.

bring us closer, holding hands, baby im the only man/
who will take his coat n pants, off and in the cold i stand/
freezing just to make you laugh, the reason i just make it past/
all the bullshit, your the reason and i just cant change the fact/

Can't wait to get to hear something from you.

[Boston]

I thought this was dope. This part would sound great rapped.

bring us closer, holding hands, baby im the only man/
who will take his coat n pants, off and in the cold i stand/
freezing just to make you laugh, the reason i just make it past/
all the bullshit, your the reason and i just cant change the fact/

Can't wait to get to hear something from you.

oh no u never heard my audio?!