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The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 19th, '09, 06:55

Imperial kingpin, sipping Bordeaux, chuckling at MCs spitting poor flows
You got more drops? But comparing pure talent, I'm getting more though
Witty war quotes elevate this style; bomb a church and desecrate its aisles
Break so many fucking laws that all criminals and felons hate my smile
Supreme Court terrified at my words and send my acapellas straight to trial
El Dorado is my sandbox; no necessity for cash so I annihilate all salaries
Sexually violate the Valkyries; "display my art" like worthwhile great "galleries"
Actions based on epiphanies; "back to the lab" with versatile flame "chemistry"

Blade to the trachea when MCs are down sleeping...
One more visitor to hell as I take the crown bleeding...
No need for long re-introductions or any affection...
Just prepare for warfare as it's my final resurrection...

Doubtful soldiers surrender; merely observe as I count all holders of splendor
...Zero is the total; divine lyricism hurls and pounds all boulders on defenders
My sound pulls older contenders and rejects the youth; cannot inject the truth
Lyrical storms create "breaking waves" like "Moses", the true guide of Exodus
Enemies forces "divide" like "mitosis"; pitiful foes throw shots so I might notice
Illness invades; all my verses just catch the plague; curses can't match my rage
Niflheim cowers when it fails to belittle my power; the Apocalypse flees in terror
Start Trojan Wars like when "Paris decreed the fairer", motto is 'Feed Me Errors'

Blade to the trachea when MCs are down sleeping...
One more visitor to hell as I take the crown bleeding...
No need for long re-introductions or any affection...
Just prepare for warfare as it's my final resurrection...
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

-Black Star, Definition

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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 19th, '09, 07:10

Holy shit at the multis in this :o...and keeping structure throughout...bravo my friend
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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 19th, '09, 07:18

Thanks dude. One of my first drops in a while.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

-Black Star, Definition

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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 19th, '09, 20:12

Bump.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

-Black Star, Definition

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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Wic Kid » Dec 19th, '09, 20:21

Eventhough you started expandin your lines again (I told you that Im more into shorter flowable lines, sorry :sweating: ), I find this extremely good. Concept was pretty tight. But the strongest element of this song were the wordplays. Absolutely amazing. Chorus was done quite good, and it would have been better if the lines in the verses were as long as the lines in the chorus. But I understand that you had to make them longer, cuz of all the wordplays. Anyway, :y: :y: :y:

Just let me ask you this, do you make audio?
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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 19th, '09, 20:27

Wic Kid wrote:Eventhough you started expandin your lines again (I told you that Im more into shorter flowable lines, sorry :sweating: ), I find this extremely good. Concept was pretty tight. But the strongest element of this song were the wordplays. Absolutely amazing. Chorus was done quite good, and it would have been better if the lines in the verses were as long as the lines in the chorus. But I understand that you had to make them longer, cuz of all the wordplays. Anyway, :y: :y: :y:

Just let me ask you this, do you make audio?

Thanks for the feedback. :worship:

Audio... hmm. I'm still thinking of that, but I don't pursue a rapping career or care for any larger exposure or shit. But for fun... probably not still. :(
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The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 20th, '09, 00:40

Bump.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby BILI » Dec 20th, '09, 00:45

Damn man that was dope,the lines are a bit long,but it flowed nice,rhymes were dope,and multies were tight :worship: :worship: ,and the hook is nice 2
overall dope drop :y:
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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 20th, '09, 01:48

BILI wrote:Damn man that was dope,the lines are a bit long,but it flowed nice,rhymes were dope,and multies were tight :worship: :worship: ,and the hook is nice 2
overall dope drop :y:

Thanks for feedback. :worship:

Been a while since I dropped, so any feedback is greatly welcome. :y:

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The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Arrinef » Dec 20th, '09, 01:51

that shit goes hard, theres more multies in there than marshmellows in lucky charms

mad props :y:
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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 20th, '09, 01:59

ArrineF wrote:that shit goes hard, theres more multies in there than marshmellows in lucky charms

mad props :y:

Mad props for feeding. :worship:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Just Silver » Dec 20th, '09, 02:05

vocab is like a lyrical history book damnn

im feeling it alot like the structure and multis are fire

overall 9.3/10
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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 20th, '09, 02:10

Just Silver wrote:vocab is like a lyrical history book damnn

im feeling it alot like the structure and multis are fire

overall 9.3/10

Thanks, man. Vocabulary wasn't really intentional, but I shouldn't complain. :sweating:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 20th, '09, 08:24

Bump.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/

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Re: The Bleeding Crown (Resurrection)

Postby Edge » Dec 20th, '09, 21:52

good shit man :y: keep at the writing... definently liking the vocab and multis... if u got time id apreciate if u could check out some of mine
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