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We Ain`t Playin-BILI Feat. Nimbus

Postby BILI » Dec 20th, '09, 00:39

(Chorus)(Nimbus)
Nim’s the one that keeps the words up
Bil’s the one to leave you burnt up

Bil’s the one to leave the beat crushed
Nim’s the one to leave his Feat. Fucked

Nim’s the one makin ya crew sick
Bil’s building hype with the blueprint

(BILI)
Damn it,now I`m gonna show you how we play
Ima steal your fuckin lyrics and sell`em on E-Bay
Bitches when I kill you,I`ll just hit replay
Kill you twenty more times,and split you 3 ways
My boy Nimbus will show you the meaning of pain
He`s brainwashing you,his rhymes are washing your brain,
My lyrics are complex like high school metamathics
Ima rhyme addict,wit lyrical ammo in my automatic
Nimb get your M-16 and shoot that dope threat rhymes
And now bitches you should hope that I`m
In a good mood,or I`ll become rude
Cause if I do,you`re fuckin done dude
No auototune,this aint some new school shit
We`re not some dudes to fool wit,you`ll end up in a pool wit
All the other dudes that we lyrically murdered
I`m done,no need to carry on further

(Chorus)(Nimbus)
Nim’s the one that keeps the words up
Bil’s the one to leave you burnt up

Bil’s the one to leave the beat crushed
Nim’s the one to leave his Feat. Fucked

Nim’s the one makin ya crew sick
Bil’s building hype with the blueprint

(Nimbus)
Upward progress, all these hoods, no good concepts
Ya Daddy should a pulled out like Tiger Wood sponsors
Microphone prophets, bullets rest inside their chrome coffins
Till I ressurect em, put em inside a John Doe’s logic

I’m like Rondo in a mosh pit, always just getting passed around
Ya girl steps to my dick, Jake Tyler, never backing down
Forever clasp the crown, with Cobra Fist tight & clutched
Nimbus is this, Sobriquet for N’ Ima’ Bust

Turn lines to dust, rhymes to rust, similes hurt you
3rd eye is burnt through, purging ya virtue
Lotta squares in my circle? I’ma put em outa shape
Like Eminem’s return, chubby two thousand eight

(Chorus)(Nimbus)
Nim’s the one that keeps the words up
Bil’s the one to leave you burnt up

Bil’s the one to leave the beat crushed
Nim’s the one to leave his Feat. Fucked

Nim’s the one makin ya crew sick
Bil’s building hype with the blueprint
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Re: We Ain`t Playin-BILI Feat. Nimbus

Postby mcZu » Dec 20th, '09, 01:36

Nice collab guys. Two things, though. BILI, you gotta expand your vocabulary, so you can play with your rhyme scheme. And work on that wordplay. Besides that, you're improving like fuck. :y:

Nimbus, lyrically it's aight, however, the flow is lacking. Work on that flow and it'll be good. :b:
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Re: We Ain`t Playin-BILI Feat. Nimbus

Postby Edge » Dec 20th, '09, 01:46

mcZu wrote:Nice collab guys. Two things, though. BILI, you gotta expand your vocabulary, so you can play with your rhyme scheme. And work on that wordplay. Besides that, you're improving like fuck. :y:

Nimbus, lyrically it's aight, however, the flow is lacking. Work on that flow and it'll be good. :b:


took the words outta my mouth... i liked it tho

especially the tiger woods line :y:
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Re: We Ain`t Playin-BILI Feat. Nimbus

Postby Nimbus_9 » Dec 20th, '09, 01:58

mcZu wrote:Nice collab guys. Two things, though. BILI, you gotta expand your vocabulary, so you can play with your rhyme scheme. And work on that wordplay. Besides that, you're improving like fuck. :y:

Nimbus, lyrically it's aight, however, the flow is lacking. Work on that flow and it'll be good. :b:

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mcZu wrote:Nice collab guys. Two things, though. BILI, you gotta expand your vocabulary, so you can play with your rhyme scheme. And work on that wordplay. Besides that, you're improving like fuck. :y:

Nimbus, lyrically it's aight, however, the flow is lacking. Work on that flow and it'll be good. :b:


took the words outta my mouth... i liked it tho

especially the tiger woods line :y:


thanks guys and the only reason mine didn't flow outstanding is because we didn't write to a beat

check out me and Fa-Q's collab where my verses were more flow oriented

thanks Billi for the collab, turned out pretty good :y:
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Re: We Ain`t Playin-BILI Feat. Nimbus

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 20th, '09, 02:06

Great collaboration. Kind of agree with mcZu on some of the vocabulary expansion for BILI and Nimbus's overall flow. Loved some of that wordplay laced within though, as well as the multies.

Biggest problem I probably have is the hook, which was weak compared to verses. But besides that, definitely a solid team-up and I look forward to reading more of them. :y:
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Re: We Ain`t Playin-BILI Feat. Nimbus

Postby BILI » Dec 20th, '09, 02:14

Thx guys

And np Nimb,whenever you wanna collab,just hit me up ;)
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Re: We Ain`t Playin-BILI Feat. Nimbus

Postby BILI » Dec 20th, '09, 03:14

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Re: We Ain`t Playin-BILI Feat. Nimbus

Postby Spyder » Dec 20th, '09, 03:19

collab was alright for me, BILI im goin with everybody else man, vocabulary :y: its was lacking here
keep working on the multies and shit man

Nimbus, it was alright. you got the mechanics down, now you just need to make sense of it all
it seemed like to me things were put in there just to rhyme.

P.s i love Never Back Down
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Re: We Ain`t Playin-BILI Feat. Nimbus

Postby BILI » Dec 20th, '09, 18:50

Thx for the feed spyder :y:
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