Ink of the Mind (Nirvana) - Relapse & Spyder

[mcZu]

Relapse, flow wise, you got some things to improve. Spyder, vocab and wordplay wise, you got some things to improve, besides that, it's a good collab. Hook is kinda weak, imo, dunno why.. Anyways, nice collab.

[Spyder]

yea i cant wordplay for shit
but i mean you can only get so much of a vocab for u swager jack Anon

[Nimbus_9]

before I was just trying to piss you off now for real feed

Relapse - you're excessive use of vocab isn't my cup of tea but it least makes sense, kudos there, when I flowed your multis they matched up perfectly and gave me a flow instantly, only thing is what you have as 1 line took up like 3 when spittin' it lol, I don't really prefer your style but it was all around clever I guess and was pretty good

Chorus- cool lol

Spyder - good hard flow, more street appealing lyrics I agree with Anon on your punch reaching but I know how that can feel, don't like gun references near the end but whatever floats ya boat, in review you relied on your flow which heavily contrasted Relapse

this track is like when opposites attract I guess, I liked it though

[Spyder]

thanks for the real feed bro

and i didnt even see that anon had left feed on this through PK
if you can see this how exactly do you mean switching up my verses?
i write emotional, then hard, then story telling

[Fa-Q]

Holy shit guys....yall both were spittin on here....some of the best verses from both of yall...Relapse..oh my god...your verse was crazy lyrical and just wow...and spyder yours was fuckin awesome too....both stayed lyrically sound through out your respectable verses...


11/10

[Relapse.LP]

Relapse, flow wise, you got some things to improve. Spyder, vocab and wordplay wise, you got some things to improve, besides that, it's a good collab. Hook is kinda weak, imo, dunno why.. Anyways, nice collab.

Yeah, I understand my verses typically have too long of a line, but I rap pretty fast, so I'm just accustomed to that kind of rap. But I'll try to shorten my lines next time.

before I was just trying to piss you off now for real feed

Relapse - you're excessive use of vocab isn't my cup of tea but it least makes sense, kudos there, when I flowed your multis they matched up perfectly and gave me a flow instantly, only thing is what you have as 1 line took up like 3 when spittin' it lol, I don't really prefer your style but it was all around clever I guess and was pretty good

Chorus- cool lol

Spyder - good hard flow, more street appealing lyrics I agree with Anon on your punch reaching but I know how that can feel, don't like gun references near the end but whatever floats ya boat, in review you relied on your flow which heavily contrasted Relapse

this track is like when opposites attract I guess, I liked it though

Thanks, I guess. Wasn't trying to be too complex this time, but I kind of moved away from my regular style by a bit here. Focused more on multies, which isn't really typical of me, but I'll shorten my lines next time for better flow and shit like that.

Holy shit guys....yall both were spittin on here....some of the best verses from both of yall...Relapse..oh my god...your verse was crazy lyrical and just wow...and spyder yours was fuckin awesome too....both stayed lyrically sound through out your respectable verses...


11/10

Thanks for the feedback.

[Nimbus_9]

hey will you guys vote on this

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[gutawafang]

Relapse, your vocab is very good man. No fucking doubt man.

I had difficulty pronouncing the words sometimes.

But definitely, definitely fucking inspired me man.

Spyder, if compared to Relapse, yours came less good. It still came good but not as good compared to Relapse.

But still, it's the high level of complexity that inspired me man. It's fucking awesome to read this shit.


This collab overall is full of MULTIS, and a great amount of skills portrayed.

[Relapse.LP]

Relapse, your vocab is very good man. No fucking doubt man.

I had difficulty pronouncing the words sometimes.

But definitely, definitely fucking inspired me man.

Spyder, if compared to Relapse, yours came less good. It still came good but not as good compared to Relapse.

But still, it's the high level of complexity that inspired me man. It's fucking awesome to read this shit.


This collab overall is full of MULTIS, and a great amount of skills portrayed.

Thanks, bro.

Vocabulary really wasn't my focus, but thanks anyways.

[Spyder]

oh yea thanks

propz for the feed everyone

[Relapse.LP]

Relapse, your verse was really good, imo. Plenty of advanced vocabulary that actually flows nicely together and still makes sense. You look like a pretty experienced writer. The chorus was really short and simple, but I liked it a lot.

Props, keep writing.

And Spyder's verse was good too.

Thanks for the feed.

[classthe_king]

Relapse, like ive said before your lines are really long. You would have to be rapping this really really fast to get it to go with a beat. Lyrically its great, vocab is exellent, better then anything i could do, but maybe its a little to lyrical to be heard in a rap song. This honestly could not be rapped and still work.

Spyder, i can see that your writing has evolved to a more audio type writing as your recording. Shorter lines that may not all be exactly even but it still flows well. Nothing in your verse really stood out to me though. You had good rhymes and some alright punches but everything was just average and i won't remember it tommorrow.

[Relapse.LP]

Relapse, like ive said before your lines are really long. You would have to be rapping this really really fast to get it to go with a beat. Lyrically its great, vocab is exellent, better then anything i could do, but maybe its a little to lyrical to be heard in a rap song. This honestly could not be rapped and still work.

Spyder, i can see that your writing has evolved to a more audio type writing as your recording. Shorter lines that may not all be exactly even but it still flows well. Nothing in your verse really stood out to me though. You had good rhymes and some alright punches but everything was just average and i won't remember it tommorrow.

Props for the feedback.

[Spyder]