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Go Hard Or Go Home

Postby Tash8 » Dec 23rd, '09, 05:02

just some punchline work please..

I'm hard and it ain't just in the morning
i'm talking all the time, during, after and before then
they'll be playing them organs when i "key" in on your organs
see i don't give a fuck, man I do it outta boredom
so go hard or go home, this heart that i own
wont ever let me stop so i always keep going
i'm flowin so hard like rhianna and jeezy
muhafuckas I ain't lyin' so believe me
I'm the lion-Tamer, and ya'll being tamed so easy
cowards go home 'fore someone hurts your feelings
before they start rippin up this magazine
i ain't talkin cosmopolitian, ha naw an m-16
dexamposine, amoxicillian, tylonel and advils
got me going harder than a bunch of viagra pills
i'm always keepin busy like a tie on the knob
and fuck bill gates, i'm never micro or soft
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Re: Go Hard Or Go Home

Postby J Roc » Dec 23rd, '09, 05:04

Bravo .... :y:
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Re: Go Hard Or Go Home

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 23rd, '09, 05:06

A little simple for my taste, but the Viagra line was nice.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Go Hard Or Go Home

Postby Tash8 » Dec 23rd, '09, 05:18

SIMPLE MY FUCKIN ASS--wow i'm tired of ppl caling this shit simple, just cause it doesn't have multi syllable rhyming does not mean it's simple... do you get the punchlines?'


I'm hard and it ain't just in the morning :: morning wood??

i'm talking all the time, during, after and before then
they'll be playing them organs when i "key" in on your organs ::organs get played in church during funerals, organs are also body parts

see i don't give a fuck, man I do it outta boredom
so go hard or go home, this heart that i own
wont ever let me stop so i always keep going
i'm flowin so hard like rhianna and jeezy
muhafuckas I ain't lyin' so believe me
I'm the lion-Tamer, and ya'll being tamed so easy ::i guess this one i can't blame you for not getting.. but my real name is Tamer and a lion tamer is a guy who keeps everyone tamed..

cowards go home 'fore someone hurts your feelings
before they start rippin up this magazine
i ain't talkin cosmopolitian, ha naw an m-16 :: cosmopolitian is a magazine, but a magazine is also a clip for a gun (aka the m16)

dexamposine, amoxicillian, tylonel and advils
got me going harder than a bunch of viagra pills ::you get this

i'm always keepin busy like a tie on the knob ::getting busy:sex, tie on the knob...ring a bell?

and fuck bill gates, i'm never micro or soft::[b]this song is about going hard, bill gates is microsoft creator?
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Re: Go Hard Or Go Home

Postby Solace » Dec 23rd, '09, 05:39

I'm the lion-Tamer, and ya'll being tamed so easy

I'm hard and it ain't just in the morning

Yes, those are simple. The rest are pretty dope.
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Re: Go Hard Or Go Home

Postby Relapse.LP » Dec 23rd, '09, 06:31

Tash8 wrote:SIMPLE MY FUCKIN ASS--wow i'm tired of ppl caling this shit simple, just cause it doesn't have multi syllable rhyming does not mean it's simple... do you get the punchlines?'


I'm hard and it ain't just in the morning :: morning wood??

i'm talking all the time, during, after and before then
they'll be playing them organs when i "key" in on your organs ::organs get played in church during funerals, organs are also body parts

see i don't give a fuck, man I do it outta boredom
so go hard or go home, this heart that i own
wont ever let me stop so i always keep going
i'm flowin so hard like rhianna and jeezy
muhafuckas I ain't lyin' so believe me
I'm the lion-Tamer, and ya'll being tamed so easy ::i guess this one i can't blame you for not getting.. but my real name is Tamer and a lion tamer is a guy who keeps everyone tamed..

cowards go home 'fore someone hurts your feelings
before they start rippin up this magazine
i ain't talkin cosmopolitian, ha naw an m-16 :: cosmopolitian is a magazine, but a magazine is also a clip for a gun (aka the m16)

dexamposine, amoxicillian, tylonel and advils
got me going harder than a bunch of viagra pills ::you get this

i'm always keepin busy like a tie on the knob ::getting busy:sex, tie on the knob...ring a bell?

and fuck bill gates, i'm never micro or soft::[b]this song is about going hard, bill gates is microsoft creator?

Smfh. You can't even take an honest opinion from a user? I got all of your punchlines except the Tamer one you said, but to be honest, the majority of them were pretty fucking weak. It's my opinion. Yes, you barely have any decent multies, but the punchlines didn't make up much for that, so just quit bitching and accept the fact that it IS simple. God, I used to think you were a chill dude.
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Go Hard Or Go Home

Postby Tash8 » Dec 23rd, '09, 06:36

:laughing: lmao ok..
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Re: Go Hard Or Go Home

Postby Tash8 » Dec 23rd, '09, 06:36

Solace wrote:I'm the lion-Tamer, and ya'll being tamed so easy

I'm hard and it ain't just in the morning

Yes, those are simple. The rest are pretty dope.


thx man
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