Song about a girl

[Fa-Q]

This is a different girl then Bre....no chorus like always



Will you teach me wonderful things, like how to slow dance,
I'll teach you wonderful things, like all about romance,
I can take you above and beyond, to higher skies,
Where all you see is the flashing green, of fire flies,
Did I or have I told you, that the even your eyes,
Know their so beautiful, they're thinkin about leavin the skies,
This is for and for you only, Miss ----- -------
Do you want a kiss on the lips, I'll give you one if,
You promise not to ever hold back, and not bite your lip,
I don't want to keep you from your poetry that might slip,
Your blonde curls, looks like the sun set weavin in a cloud,
And as the sun sets, I guarantee he's leavin proud,
Perfect angel, please tell me I'm not off much,
Because all I want to feel is your soft touch,
I can be your superman, so tell me, do my krypto eyes,
Look like blue crystal balls, do they hypnotize,
I searched, and it took me to fly around the world,
Searching for perfection, but I found the girl,



Have I ever told you, that I stair at your lips,
Because your frown, is like the suns rare eclipse,
I'll do whatever, where ever, whenever to make you smile,
I'll wait for a shooting star, knowing it takes a while,
And wish that whatever I do, I dry your tears,
I hope that all those tears, just dissappears,
Like after rain, then soon after blue sky clears,
You are more than my angel, you're my cloud nine,
You sit at the north star, showing the sun how to shine,
Everyday when it rises, I tell him, now you're mine,
If you were here, I would swirl your hair,
Just to be assured, that my girl is there,
And this I speak, just so you let me kiss your cheek,
When we hold hands, you give me a warm palm,
When my ship is rough seas, you make the storm calm,
You're the night sky, the thunder to my lightning,
So as each second together, I wonder what might be,


We're not like a picture, caught in a frame,
We're like a burning forest fire, but not a flame,
We're more like a movie, as each day passes,
Never black and white, just grey flashes,
You make me, everyday, have the four seasons,
The wisest man, couldn't give me more reasons,
Spring, cause I just have to see you, just one time,
Summer, because, you're the sun's sunshine,
Autumn because of the most beautiful middle name,
Winter because I'll kiss you, without even a little shame,
Spring because everytime I see you, my heart will jump,
Once I see those blue eyes, the blood
starts to pump,
Summer, like holding your hand on the swingset,
Its a bummer, I haven't heard you voice sing yet,
Fall, because around you, it feels my leaves have been stripped,
You knocked me off my feet, and each grieves when tripped,
Winter, because you make my cold heart, new and warm,
My formless soul, with you with me, starts to form,

[mcZu]

I like it, especially the third verse. Keep it up Fa-Q.

[Fa-Q]

Thanks Zu

[Relapse.LP]

I think I said it before, but there's one thing really special about your verses, along with Yah-hah (whereis he nowadays?),and it's that multies & flow seems natural to you, which is definitely a sure sign of technique level. The structure, although a bit inconsistent, isn't a big problem and everything seems put together beautifully. But since multies are easy to grasp for you and you've been writing a lot about girls/relationships, it'd be awesome if you could expand your subject range & creativity to about other shit or something like that. It doesn't really matter, but with your skill with words, it would be cool.

[Fa-Q]

Thanks for the feed Relapse and this is only my fourth love song...I guess that is sort of a lot considering its a large percentage of my drops...I think I'm done with love songs for a while...they take a lot out of me....oh and structure? I thought I did pretty good on this...better than some of my previous drops lol or when I first started

Thanks again Relapse

[DƎRDYPK]

Damnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn bro
I was digging that
the multies were there, the flow was there, this is as Pink said pretty smooth
my favorite part was the 2nd verse
very good stuff
I'm sure that if you showed that girl this piece you would blow her mind

[Fa-Q]

Thanks PINK and Derdy

[Fa-Q]

do you think i should have a chorus

[Relapse.LP]

Nah, it's perfect.

[Fa-Q]

Ok thanks Relapse

[Fa-Q]

Bump

[Yah-hah]

Yeah man you know I always dig the mushy stuff lol. Bro its easily your smoothest song. transitions inbetween multis is perfect. Great imagery and emotion. One of your best.