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On Top

Postby Tash8 » Dec 24th, '09, 11:45

like missionary, man, i'm always on top
an envisionary i'm grindin all day nonstop
it was the way i was brought up
till the day i got caught up
felt the pain like a horror
now, it's made me stronger
like rockstar and vodka, i'm nothin you'd be fond of
they keep saying i must be lovin' the insomnia why?
cause to stay on top you never sleep someones always eye-in ya
and you wonder why I, I'm always on the look out
cause you never know when you shook from something crook out
so look how I got plenty beef like the meat isle,
make muhafuckas feel so weak and speak senile
meanwhile i'm on your corner street shop
like when music goes silent-------------
--------------- you'll start to feel your heartbeat stop
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Re: On Top

Postby Le Tunisien » Dec 24th, '09, 16:45

nice piece :8)
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Re: On Top

Postby Tash8 » Dec 24th, '09, 20:58

thx guys anyone?
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Re: On Top

Postby classthe_king » Dec 24th, '09, 21:01

Dang this was dope :worship: The flow was perfect and something about the lyrics made this stand out alot. Really like it.
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: On Top

Postby Tash8 » Dec 24th, '09, 21:16

classthe_king wrote:Dang this was dope :worship: The flow was perfect and something about the lyrics made this stand out alot. Really like it.


haha thanks man, it's cause i actually tried to rhyme...ppl were saying that i was droppin simple and shit, but i was focusin on other things cause i'm still on my learning curve
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Re: On Top

Postby Solace » Dec 25th, '09, 01:04

Was pretty dope man. Loved the ending. Flow was dope, something I could go with easily and the rhymes were nice.
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Re: On Top

Postby BILI » Dec 25th, '09, 01:22

Its dope man,nice rhymes,and flow was ok,that silent thing at the end was nice :y: ,overall nice drop homie :y:
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Re: On Top

Postby Tash8 » Dec 25th, '09, 03:50

thx guys
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Re: On Top

Postby Spyder » Dec 25th, '09, 05:05

love the insomnia line ;)
nice drop bro
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