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Still Lust

Postby gutawafang » Dec 28th, '09, 05:29

I'll still eat you up no matter how venomous you are
I'll still have you even if you take your randomness too far
I'll still kiss you, lick your cheeks like lollipops
I'll still stand up for you when I fall and drop
When I trip, whenever it will be when my heart skips
Whenever it will be, I'll still kiss your fucking lips
Cuz you're irresistable, like fucking with Megan Fox
In a two-seater Ferrari, that's when my wagon rocks
I'll still chew you like Gummy Bears and marshmallows
I'll still have you even if you hide in the dark shadows
I'll still kiss you, lick your nose shinier than Rudolph's
I'll still answer the riddles you want me to solve
When I breathe, whenever it will be, I fucking lust you
Whenever it will be, I marked your words and I trust you
Cuz I wanna eat your every motherfucking body part up
In a two-seater Ferrari, now let's get that start up
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Re: Still Lust

Postby Solace » Dec 28th, '09, 23:42

Well that was kind of fucked up :confusion: Not the Gutawafang that I know haha...Flow was decent, could be improved with more internal rhymes but there's nothing really negative about the flow. Content was meh. Rhymes were nice.
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Re: Still Lust

Postby gutawafang » Dec 29th, '09, 05:35

Solace wrote:Well that was kind of fucked up :confusion: Not the Gutawafang that I know haha...Flow was decent, could be improved with more internal rhymes but there's nothing really negative about the flow. Content was meh. Rhymes were nice.

haha. yeah man. Thanks for checking it man. ;)
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Postby Solace » Dec 29th, '09, 05:36

Get back on your heartfelt shit man. I read them but dont feed them mostly, but theyre actually really touching.
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Re: Still Lust

Postby gutawafang » Dec 29th, '09, 05:37

Solace wrote:Get back on your heartfelt shit man. I read them but dont feed them mostly, but theyre actually really touching.

haha. Thanks a lot homie. I appreciate the compliment. :)
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Re: Still Lust

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 29th, '09, 07:15

Yeah its different but I kinda dig it. Flow is weird but its cool lol.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Postby gutawafang » Dec 30th, '09, 03:59

Yah-hah wrote:Yeah its different but I kinda dig it. Flow is weird but its cool lol.

LOL. Thanks man. :)
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Re: Still Lust

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 30th, '09, 11:36

No problem man. Hit me up for another collab sometime man
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Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
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Re: Still Lust

Postby gutawafang » Dec 31st, '09, 04:52

Yah-hah wrote:No problem man. Hit me up for another collab sometime man

WORD. ;)
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