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As The Night Falls

Postby Solace » Dec 29th, '09, 00:02

I was neglectful, never knew I could be so offset
Shifty situations feel like a nuclear bomb threat,
Crippling concepts, not content in this state of mind,
Wary, wishing that somebody could just make it fine,
Several snaps of your finger and it's disappeared,
Induce imaginations where my reality isn't clear,
Horrendous hearings my ears have experienced,
And before barbaric battles, I wasn't fearing this,
Try and deduct divine entities out from your mind,
Erase entities of hate just to find another kind,
And honestly animosity attacks it's own species,
Civil war wages, to these wounds there's no treating,
Then there's no seeing through opaque distances,
Yet you try to look for safety but you're missing it,
So some battles are maybe meant to lose,
Out of options, for you there's nothing left to choose.
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Re: As The Night Falls

Postby Spyder » Dec 29th, '09, 00:07

i like it man, different than some of your last peices, though it seems ot have more complexity and vocab so pros on that :y:
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Re: As The Night Falls

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 29th, '09, 00:09

This reminded me of Anon for some reason (RIP)...but dope drop...the multis were great and the structure was perfect...keep it up solace
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Re: As The Night Falls

Postby Solace » Dec 29th, '09, 00:15

Thanks you two :worship:

Returned the feed to you Fa-Q btw.
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Re: As The Night Falls

Postby Spyder » Dec 29th, '09, 00:21

Fa-Q wrote:This reminded me of Anon for some reason (RIP)...but dope drop...the multis were great and the structure was perfect...keep it up solace


reminded me too lol
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Re: As The Night Falls

Postby BILI » Dec 29th, '09, 00:34

Damn that was nice homie,I loved the multies,and it flowed damn good


Horrendous hearings my ears have experienced,
And before barbaric battles, I wasn't fearing this,..............Nice :y:

and that at beginning wit nuclear threat or smh was dope 2


Mind checkin my new drop
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Re: As The Night Falls

Postby Solace » Dec 29th, '09, 20:00

Spyder wrote:
Fa-Q wrote:This reminded me of Anon for some reason (RIP)...but dope drop...the multis were great and the structure was perfect...keep it up solace


reminded me too lol

I'll take that as a compliment :)

BILI wrote:Damn that was nice homie,I loved the multies,and it flowed damn good


Horrendous hearings my ears have experienced,
And before barbaric battles, I wasn't fearing this,..............Nice :y:

and that at beginning wit nuclear threat or smh was dope 2


Mind checkin my new drop

Thanks bro, and I checked your drop last night :y:
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Re: As The Night Falls

Postby mcZu » Dec 30th, '09, 18:12

I don't see why this reminds y'all of Anon, style is completely different. I liked it, nice mulites, flow is good and the complexity is good as well. Keep doing your thing Solace.
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Re: As The Night Falls

Postby Solace » Dec 30th, '09, 18:22

Thanks Zu :worship:
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Re: As The Night Falls

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Dec 30th, '09, 20:55

Love it.
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

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