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Is It Worth It?

Postby BILI » Dec 27th, '09, 19:09

I got Biggies and Pacs skeletons in my room tellin me what to write
I`m in a dark tunnel, waiting either for death or light
I feel lonely, most of the time I spend smokin cigarettes at night
Fucked up moments are puzzles, sort them and you`ll get my life
Everyday I`m getting older and older, like I`m becoming bone
I kinda feel like a soldier, but the one that aint coming home
I can already picture myself running toward the Lord
Picture fades,now I`m running toward the horde with swords
Picture flames, everywhere, I`m in hell, I felt cold steel inside of my chest
Pain, but I could only hear Satan screamin:"kneel in front of the best"
It was just a dream, now I`m back in my room just droppin some rhymes
Life`s fucked, so now I`m wondering sometimes
Is it worth it??


A keystyle
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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby Fa-Q » Dec 27th, '09, 19:21

I can already picture myself running toward the Lord,
Picture fades,now I`m running toward the horde with swords

Favorite lines....pretty good...interesting concept...but a request cause its easier to read, can you put a space after your commas...:) good shit Buffalo BILI
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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby BILI » Dec 27th, '09, 19:26

Fa-Q wrote:I can already picture myself running toward the Lord,
Picture fades,now I`m running toward the horde with swords

Favorite lines....pretty good...interesting concept...but a request cause its easier to read, can you put a space after your commas...:) good shit Buffalo BILI

thx a lot man.
you mean to put space like the way I did it :unsure:
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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby Emadyville » Dec 27th, '09, 19:30

for how short that was and being keystyle, i really liked it, very creative, loved the ending the most tho i think :y:
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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby BILI » Dec 27th, '09, 19:52

Emadyville wrote:for how short that was and being keystyle, i really liked it, very creative, loved the ending the most tho i think :y:

thx homie :y:
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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby Element. » Dec 28th, '09, 03:04

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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby gutawafang » Dec 28th, '09, 04:14

Cool man.

Picture fades,now I`m running toward the horde with swords
Picture flames, everywhere, I`m in hell, I felt cold steel inside of my chest
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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby BILI » Dec 28th, '09, 15:46

thx guys
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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby BILI » Dec 28th, '09, 23:46

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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 29th, '09, 08:01

Yeah homie that line everyone is quoting is sick, the tupac biggie skeleton thing is ill. Nice keystyle man, Hit me up for another collba sometime man. :y:
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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby BILI » Dec 29th, '09, 13:05

Yah-hah wrote:Yeah homie that line everyone is quoting is sick, the tupac biggie skeleton thing is ill. Nice keystyle man, Hit me up for another collba sometime man. :y:

thx homie,and yeah I`ll hit you up :y: :y:
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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby Solace » Dec 29th, '09, 19:52

I read this imagining Lloyd Banks was spitting it haha. Real nice stuff, great for a keystyled. Man this ENTIRE part flows like a beast to me, and lyrically it was dope:

I feel lonely, most of the time I spend smokin cigarettes at night
Fucked up moments are puzzles, sort them and you`ll get my life
Everyday I`m getting older and older, like I`m becoming bone
I kinda feel like a soldier, but the one that aint coming home
I can already picture myself running toward the Lord
Picture fades,now I`m running toward the horde with swords


The 2 bolded lines are my favourite.
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Re: Is It Worth It?

Postby BILI » Dec 30th, '09, 16:58

Solace wrote:I read this imagining Lloyd Banks was spitting it haha. Real nice stuff, great for a keystyled. Man this ENTIRE part flows like a beast to me, and lyrically it was dope:

I feel lonely, most of the time I spend smokin cigarettes at night
Fucked up moments are puzzles, sort them and you`ll get my life
Everyday I`m getting older and older, like I`m becoming bone
I kinda feel like a soldier, but the one that aint coming home
I can already picture myself running toward the Lord
Picture fades,now I`m running toward the horde with swords


The 2 bolded lines are my favourite.

thx a lot homie,appreciate it,I had a lil writers block,but I`m comin out :y:
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