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Postby bullet_boy46 » Dec 29th, '09, 23:04

i remember posting this like a couple of months ago when solace was teaching, this was my second attempt at rapping, i only got 2 responses lets see what the new guys think :shifty:

i use my 12 gauge with rage
i fully engage in the batting cage
im more colder then the ice age
with my bat ill brake your rib cage.
my rhymes are hypnotic, they make you feel physhotic
i engage in some narcotics, weed, speed, meth
probably leading myself to my death.
ending up taking my one last breath on my death bed.
either that or get filled with lead, or ending up brain dead
all has been said and done, but i still aint number one
at the end of the day, what it amount to
just people talking trash screaming "fuck u"
look what ive become, call me a bum, scum,or dumb
in the long run, im the one thats gonna win
your the one thats gonna be eating out of the garbage bin.


like i said this was probably my second attempt at rapping when i wrote this, :unsure: go easy on me
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Re: Engage

Postby Spyder » Dec 29th, '09, 23:15

bullet_boy46 wrote:i remember posting this like a couple of months ago when solace was teaching, this was my second attempt at rapping, i only got 2 responses lets see what the new guys think :shifty:

i use my 12 gauge with rage
i fully engage in the batting cage
im more colder then the ice age
with my bat ill brake your rib cage.
my rhymes are hypnotic, they make you feel physhotic
i engage in some narcotics, weed, speed, meth
probably leading myself to my death.
ending up taking my one last breath on my death bed.
either that or get filled with lead, or ending up brain dead
all has been said and done, but i still aint number one
at the end of the day, what it amount to
just people talking trash screaming "fuck u"
look what ive become, call me a bum, scum,or dumb
in the long run, im the one thats gonna win
your the one thats gonna be eating out of the garbage bin.


like i said this was probably my second attempt at rapping when i wrote this, :unsure: go easy on me


was this the piece you copied from that guy?
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Re: Engage

Postby bullet_boy46 » Dec 29th, '09, 23:16

Spyder wrote:
bullet_boy46 wrote:i remember posting this like a couple of months ago when solace was teaching, this was my second attempt at rapping, i only got 2 responses lets see what the new guys think :shifty:

i use my 12 gauge with rage
i fully engage in the batting cage
im more colder then the ice age
with my bat ill brake your rib cage.
my rhymes are hypnotic, they make you feel physhotic
i engage in some narcotics, weed, speed, meth
probably leading myself to my death.
ending up taking my one last breath on my death bed.
either that or get filled with lead, or ending up brain dead
all has been said and done, but i still aint number one
at the end of the day, what it amount to
just people talking trash screaming "fuck u"
look what ive become, call me a bum, scum,or dumb
in the long run, im the one thats gonna win
your the one thats gonna be eating out of the garbage bin.


like i said this was probably my second attempt at rapping when i wrote this, :unsure: go easy on me


was this the piece you copied from that guy?


what guy, no this is mine i can give u the link from the first time i posted it...


My PROOF! viewtopic.php?f=24&t=68265&p=869665&hilit=engage#p869665
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Re: Engage

Postby Spyder » Dec 29th, '09, 23:18

idk i just member you stole someone verse on something :unsure:
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Re: Engage

Postby bullet_boy46 » Dec 29th, '09, 23:19

Spyder wrote:idk i just member you stole someone verse on something :unsure:

i was accused, i know i didnt do it...but i cant make anyone believe, BUT theres a new year coming im putting that behind me...AND NOW what do you think of the keystyle?
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Re: Engage

Postby Spyder » Dec 29th, '09, 23:25

its better for you, im seeing like you want to try more compleixty and vocab
but you gotta make rhymes more direct with the multies, for example

hypnotic
psycotic
narcotics

only the "tics" rhyme

go for something like, "psycotic" lookin through "my-optics"
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Re: Engage

Postby Solace » Dec 29th, '09, 23:27

bullet_boy46 wrote:
Spyder wrote:idk i just member you stole someone verse on something :unsure:

i was accused, i know i didnt do it...but i cant make anyone believe, BUT theres a new year coming im putting that behind me...AND NOW what do you think of the keystyle?

What do you mean you know you didnt do it...You posted the topic and I showed everyone you took it from Yahoo Answers. :unsure:

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=72774

But now that the biting is over..From biting verses to other peoples graphics I haven't seen you do either in a while so keep at that for the new year :y:
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Re: Engage

Postby bullet_boy46 » Dec 29th, '09, 23:33

Solace wrote:
bullet_boy46 wrote:
Spyder wrote:idk i just member you stole someone verse on something :unsure:

i was accused, i know i didnt do it...but i cant make anyone believe, BUT theres a new year coming im putting that behind me...AND NOW what do you think of the keystyle?

What do you mean you know you didnt do it...You posted the topic and I showed everyone you took it from Yahoo Answers. :unsure:

viewtopic.php?f=24&t=72774

But now that the biting is over..From biting verses to other peoples graphics I haven't seen you do either in a while so keep at that for the new year :y:

i didnt post it, i said my brother did, maybe you might know him, he goes by the name of daddycoco, he wanted to get back at me BUT like u said, LETS NOT REMEMBER THIS CRAP ITS OVER ;) now what you think of this solace, you were teaching me at this time
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Re: Engage

Postby Solace » Dec 29th, '09, 23:35

Alright, well if it was then good.

About this piece, I remember you showed me this a long time ago...I gave you another bunch of tips and hell atm I'm pretty tired to feed lol go with what Spyder said me and him write very similarly so yeah :y:
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