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Clash of the wolves

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 30th, '09, 06:23

(Yah-hah)
Either sight impaired or your eyes been where the blindest stare,
Me and Zu running through to find this bear with sinus flares,
It’s do or die, suicide and this recruiters lies have me jumping from the highest stair,
It’s high up there but al least the view is nice,
Success in death is nice only if you do it twice,
I’m screaming curse words that hurt worse now that I’m through with life,
I take my feelings place my feelings on this shelf reduced to please her,
Now I'm typin writing with my self-induced amnesia,
Welcome to the siezure or well-improved teacher with helme-proof features,
Carrying hell's removed creatures in a cell for two weeks yer,
Elven root features are meaningless,
I transform into a wolf like haha fuck twilight,
What nightlife? It's my life Stabbin Jacob with my knife,
Like Fuck you I'm the true native who's roots traded for a used fragrance,
Lurkin in the shadows used blatant knives two-bladed, wise with my hair loose braided,
At hell's door like who's waiting I've knocked it like 3 times,
At heavens floor like who's staying I've offered like 3 times,
Sittin at your computer tryin to read my letters with the speed of leopards,
Staring through my blindspots now I can see no better,
So I dream to catch her with my beads and feather so we can see the weather.



The beasts of night transform into the clash of wolves,
The traps we pull are sick enough to bash your skull,
It's actual, your death is in vain when it's death from my fangs,
It's said when your game all you are is left out to hang,

(Zu)
The aura revolves, we fly like seagulls, whenever we form
Yeah, we, wolves, a grand dagger emcee storm
We to clever to fuck with you bitches-
We don’t crash digits like we used to play golf
Wolves stay bombing like we always gulf
I hit you mo’ often than the buzz of a hook with Trey Songz
I sent ‘em to the afterlife after three like I may palm-
A napalm bomb, you just front on every song
Fronting? Yeah, which you’re the master of
‘cause those guns will never come out the closet like Asher Roth
I’m faster, I’m rough and I’m sure I’ll be
On top ‘cause there aint no real pressure see
I don’t fuck with you inmature emcees I aint no Pleasure P
You better be following the leader, call me Eric B
It’s my era, flee, yeah, you wack, very..
You couldn’t be calling me names if you had Zu on ya Black Berry
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Clash of the wolves

Postby Spyder » Dec 30th, '09, 06:38

that was a sick collab guys, sorry ive been around the battle section :sweating:

Yah-hah - Dope on the rhyming and Multies man really :y: the only thing im worried about is dont rhyme just to rhyme and dont force ya multies, alot of thins at least to me were off topic. like you wanted to say things cause they multi phenomanol but didnt know how to fit em in there :sweating:
but great lyrics in complexity vocav mutlies and what have you

Zu - less lyrical than YH. but yours stayed on topic more. i liked your worplay in there with the bombing like the gulf's, the asher roth line was ehh for me, but i got a chuckle. your flowd better because your lines we shorter. but if you could incorperate great vocab and multies with your usually complex pieces. damn son :y:

i give this peice a 8/10 based on YH rhymes and multies and Zu clever lines and wordplay :smoking:
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Re: Clash of the wolves

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 30th, '09, 09:33

Thanks homie. Yeah I do rhyme just to rhyme alot lol. Kinda just workin on my multi transitions. Appreciate it
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Clash of the wolves

Postby Drama Setter » Dec 30th, '09, 10:17

great Collabo , tnx to both of you

@ Yah-hah: your rhyming is always sick and makes me say yeaahhhhhhhhhhhh, in the other hand meaning and concepts were better in this one, and yeah multies were Ok too :y:


for example:

Yah-hah wrote:It’s do or die, suicide and this recruiters lies have me jumping from the highest stair,
It’s high up there but al least the view is nice,


I like the conceptual feature in those lines :y:

@ ZU: Simple and the flow was good as always but I gotta say something about using one word for several times as such as Yeah like these lines :

Yah-hah wrote:Yeah, we, wolves, a grand dagger emcee storm
Fronting? Yeah, which you’re the master of
It’s my era, flee, yeah, you wack, very..


this is not good imo and shows the lack of rhyming and words but overal it was Ok
and my fav lines from you are these lines below

Yah-hah wrote:I don’t fuck with you inmature emcees I aint no Pleasure P
You better be following the leader, call me Eric B


Cheer :y:
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Re: Clash of the wolves

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 30th, '09, 10:20

Thanks homie always checkin :y: And that's Zu's line btw
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Clash of the wolves

Postby Drama Setter » Dec 30th, '09, 10:33

Yah-hah wrote:Thanks homie always checkin :y: And that's Zu's line btw


lol , i know but you posted that and it quoted from you :sweating:
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Re: Clash of the wolves

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 30th, '09, 10:37

Oh lol that makes sense
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Clash of the wolves

Postby Ms. Lunaverse » Dec 30th, '09, 11:14

Great song you guys. Yah-hah with the insane multies like always lol. Mc Zu you are really good. Kind of a simple flow but alot of meaning. Good job both of you
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Re: Clash of the wolves

Postby Yah-hah » Dec 30th, '09, 11:34

Thanks ma
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Clash of the wolves

Postby mcZu » Dec 30th, '09, 16:59

Thanks for the feed guys, 'preciate all the input. Yah, this is one hell of a collab we got here, we definitly need to collab again.
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