Karnivoar-By Karnivoar

[ShaBruv]

A little sumthin i wrote in a few minutes while listening to the fught music instrumental and its to that beat

Tell me what u think.

U at the carnival, now meet a Karnivoar
Kill you now tear ur shreds and throw 'em on the floor
Wanna front on me i flip on you and break ur jaw
Wanna carry on i start and end a whole new war

Wage a war? What u doin what u want it for
Tell me now tell me why ya think ur hardcore
Try to beef with me and fall thru my trapdoor
Fuck around pin you down and cut ur cold sore

The feeling got when i see all ur blood and gore
Kill you again and again cuz i want some more
Your crys for help are so feeble and i ignore
Leave your bleeding body and let the rain pour

Guts gone i aint sorry i think your done for
Take all nite for rats to knaw and knaw
Lost your feet so you wont go to a shoestore
Soon we'll see a wheelchair on the dancefloor

[lilrossy]

not too bad. flowed well. but it was kinda like amature relapse material. needs multi's and punchlines to make it more interesting, so its not jus goin on and on.
keep practicing.

[tjb]

wood have been way better if like lil rosy said more multies an punchlines were used
also more rhymes an description instead of generic words

[bapetlk]

A little sumthin i wrote in a few minutes while listening to the fught music instrumental and its to that beat

Tell me what u think.

U at the carnival, now meet a Karnivoar
Kill you now tear ur shreds and throw 'em on the floor
Wanna front on me i flip on you and break ur jaw
Wanna carry on i start and end a whole new war

Wage a war? What u doin what u want it for
Tell me now tell me why ya think ur hardcore
Try to beef with me and fall thru my trapdoor
Fuck around pin you down and cut ur cold sore

The feeling got when i see all ur blood and gore
Kill you again and again cuz i want some more
Your crys for help are so feeble and i ignore
Leave your bleeding body and let the rain pour

Guts gone i aint sorry i think your done for
Take all nite for rats to knaw and knaw
Lost your feet so you wont go to a shoestore
Soon we'll see a wheelchair on the dancefloor

STAN, go listen to something else