The Lost One(New Storytelling)

[Spyder]

True-ish story for the new album



Sometimes I like to just sit back and observe
Watch the alcoholics trip, smack on the curb.
Shit I laugh hard so I kick back as they curse
Til I saw this one kid get attacked in a blur.
As fast as it happen I can’t imagine its real
The cats just gaspin how captured he must feel.
The bastards they did steal, his shoes coat and his watch
So he returned home beaten and boozed off of the scotch
New to puffin the pot, parents dont even care
No money for clothes theyd rather leave him bare
See his stare, blank, fuck attention in school
Skip the lesson release aggression with tools.
Second guessed as a fool, to those who didn’t know him
Ask him to hangout he never ended showin
Wheres his life goin, look closer you might notice
Dudes lookin for a brighter day, the nights hopeless.
Kids always in trouble grounded for stupid shit
And music is the only thing to help the mood hes in.
Could you win, when your feelin beaten inside
Deceivin his lies, feels like hes bein eaten alive.

Hook
Sometimes life brings you down, you gotta keep goin
The music dies but keep showin, the intent to keep flowin
You may have feel apart but your still in our hearts
Never the lost one, son your not alone in the dark.

Everyday a constant struggle he’ll never be eased
Countin down the days until he’s forever deceased.
Emotion’s a beast, sometimes he cant contain it
Hopeless cuz he’s, to damn mad to explain shit.
Enraged kid shit the moods contagious
Honest pain beyond his name this dudes outrageous.
Different day nothin changes, same shit
An untamed insane brain to put it in laymen’s.
Its quite amazin, how much hes takin already
Hands aimed at the ready, brain achin but steady
Veins pulsating its tempting, these waves hidin emotion
Hes violently exposin Poseidon ridin the ocean.
Denyin the notion of friends, family and love
Why would he care when no one cares what he does?
These thugs smokin cigars and gettin paid
Always around lookin for new kids to instigate.
Cigs for weed he oughta trade hes got it made
Til a crooked deal took a meal, his block was sprayed.
Dropped his name, gone in rage the cops just aimed
He got em, no more problems hes the one lost today.

Hook
Sometimes life brings you down, you gotta keep goin
The music dies but keep showin, the intent to keep flowin
You may have feel apart but your still in our hearts
Never the lost one, son your not alone in the dark.

[Le Tunisien]

good use of multies,it flowed pretty well,plus i liked how it told a story !
dope
8.5/10

[Spyder]

thanks bro

[Le Tunisien]

anytime bro

[Yah-hah]

Yeah spidey some sick multies that flow great together. I dig the 2nd verse and hook wasn't too bad either. Nice work big homie

[Spyder]

thanks bro
bump

[classthe_king]

Story telling was great. Multis were great except in some parts it didn't really rhyme and sounded weird. Flow was perfect until the end of the second verse when you tried to make it rhyme more. Hook was ehh.

[Spyder]

thanks for the feed bro

[Spyder]

fell taht sexy body go bump bump bump

[mcZu]

Story telling was great. Multis were great except in some parts it didn't really rhyme and sounded weird. Flow was perfect until the end of the second verse when you tried to make it rhyme more. Hook was ehh.

I'ma have to go with Class on this one, but I do want to add that the flow seemed choppy in the first verse as well, half through. Story telling is nice, though you could have used a bit more of imagery, multies are fire though. And the hook is kinda corny, but besides that, I enjoyed reading it. Keep it up Spydie.

[Spyder]

thanks bro, ill try to add more imagery with my stories