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keystyle verse to rock

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 30th, '09, 21:42

I writing this to say I'm sorry I didn't mean to Embarrass You
I'm about to jump off this cliff and I left behind my Parachute
faster and Faster I'll fall to Earth in Search of the Real Me
it won't even Matter if it Hurts it'll be Worth it to Feel Free
I got my Eyes open Wide open cuz I'm not gonna Miss a Thing
even in the Whipping Wind I'm not gonna feel it If it Stings
nobody is perfect and yet were all so quick to Blame
chasing after what's gone when something still Remains
the memories Contained in your Brain are still the Same
remember the good times and try to block out the Pain
I wasn't afraid to Face them I just couldn't make it Make Sense
but I guess that won't matter by the time this Day Ends
so keep your Rhymes Strong and get your Grind On
this world won't stop turning just cuz I'm Gone
goodbye haters I hope one day that you get Enough Love
ond day your gonna realize that this life is Fucked Up
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Re: keystyle verse to rock

Postby Spyder » Dec 30th, '09, 21:56

good for a keystle, though idk if it realy was :sweating:
for a reg verse, it was alright, rhyming was pretty basic. but it seemed like an emotional piece
so vocab and crazy rhyming isnt the primary focus :smoking:

8/10 keystyle
6.5/10 written
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Re: keystyle verse to rock

Postby Rain Matrix » Dec 30th, '09, 23:43

thanks for the feedback, it was keystyle I was listening to various rock music and somehow this verse came out... I do shit like this just to practice to keep my rhyming up but I am my own worst critic and I'll have to keep writing
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