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SliK - Violently Ill

Postby SliK » Jan 5th, '10, 09:58

Just something I wrote real quick. ThundaKat and royalthugz are 2 guys from a different forum. Not really important though. Let me know what you think - this is my first written.


I'm Violently Ill so I'll Silently kill
your microphone skill without telling you what for/
get me a doctor, barracade the locked door/
i need to be stopped or you're gonna get stomped on/
flow cold when I rap, it's a fact, I freeze venues/
lyrics so phat, that they fap, to pizza menues/
ThundaKat, just sit back, royalthugz will end you/
but relax, you aint wack, hope I don't offend you/
on some real shit though, your words are tight/
never know which flow you bring to the mic/
either a wick slow burning to a stick of dynamite/
or a skitso screamin "i ain't tryin'a bite!"/
This shit I write like woolworths express/
from pen to pad in 7 minutes or less/
so don't expect my best, let me stress my next point/
when i roll this next joint/ i'm gonna make a mess/
like at a party, drinking less than you'd expect/
but smoking lots of cess, searchin for some sex/
see a pretty bitch who only looks half dressed/
walk up to her, just to woo her, compliment her new hair/
like "you there, cute as pooh bear, come party with me new years"/
take her back to my place, burst in the door,
shirts on the floor, more heat than the first world war/
back when napalm was used, stay calm, not confused/
there's no harm in abuse, but she's hardly amused/
talkin of which; i've been stalkin a bitch/
firing voodoo curses like a witch doctors uzi/
exiling you to hearses like a hitchcock movie/
defiling all your verses like misquoting scripture/
a thousand words of mine are better than a picture
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Re: SliK - Violently Ill

Postby shadyfreakzul » Jan 5th, '10, 10:09

very dope dude.
I'm strong, my word is Bond like James
Niggaz be tryin to test, but they 'week' like seven days-Canibus

I don't belong here,my dad fucked my mom in the wrong year.-Budden

like taekwondo you lack punches-Shadyfreakzul

Around here i am the Goat like the Capricorn.-Wale
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Re: SliK - Violently Ill

Postby SliK » Jan 5th, '10, 11:02

Thanks man, I can write more depending on the responses. I had a bit of fun writing that :)
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Re: SliK - Violently Ill

Postby Edge » Jan 5th, '10, 14:11

nice especially for someone new :y:
be the best you can be, and if thats not good enough for people... than fuck em
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Re: SliK - Violently Ill

Postby SliK » Jan 6th, '10, 05:32

Thanks mate :)
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Re: SliK - Violently Ill

Postby Edge » Jan 6th, '10, 08:02

Coleon wrote:that's actually great for a new member :y: you should drop more man

collab with people here too and stay active :y: battle :y: bring friends and make a crew :y:

:worship: do your thing niqqa


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Re: SliK - Violently Ill

Postby SliK » Jan 6th, '10, 15:15

Thanks for the words of encouragement :)

I might drop something a little more serious if I can get in the right mind frame this week.

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