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Coleon - Don't Say A Word (Drink The Kool Aid) Feat. DerdyPK

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Re: Coleon - Don't Say A Word (Drink The Kool Aid) Feat. DerdyPK

Postby Fa-Q » Jan 7th, '10, 22:59

Good shit guys...liked both your guys' verses...I don't agree with the politics but still...good shit guys...lovin the multis yall...way to represent Gravedancers Co.
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Re: Coleon - Don't Say A Word (Drink The Kool Aid) Feat. DerdyPK

Postby Spyder » Jan 7th, '10, 23:02

:worship:

best thing ive seen in CW sense the random spurt of people coming in

PK you need to write more man, that verse was fire. it had the emotion and a fantastic message
reminded me of Pac

Cole, gettin back on your shit. this isnt what your best at but you made it work. you guys had great chemistry on this piece. your multies were great and a nece vobaulary that made the rhymes stick out

rookies this is a piece to gain from

9/10 :b:
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Re: Coleon - Don't Say A Word (Drink The Kool Aid) Feat. DerdyPK

Postby Spyder » Jan 8th, '10, 00:12

i dont get the title though
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Re: Coleon - Don't Say A Word (Drink The Kool Aid) Feat. DerdyPK

Postby Spyder » Jan 8th, '10, 00:15

1, thats fucked up
2, that fucked up you know that
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Re: Coleon - Don't Say A Word (Drink The Kool Aid) Feat. DerdyPK

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 8th, '10, 00:18

sick collab guys ,, it's dope. best shit i hve read recently , for real , coleon ,, your verse is fucking dope man ,,,,,,,,,,,, you're at anther level now for real , i remember the time when you start writing ,, and i see you now ,, damn , can't even believe it's da same person ,, great job bro ,, really great... keep it up bro ,,,
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Re: Coleon - Don't Say A Word (Drink The Kool Aid) Feat. DerdyPK

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jan 8th, '10, 00:19

damn :worship:
I really loved how your verse came out Cole :y:
very dope my friend :flower:
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Re: Coleon - Don't Say A Word (Drink The Kool Aid) Feat. DerdyPK

Postby gutawafang » Jan 8th, '10, 05:10

Fuck yeah. I dig the whole shit man. This can be used in Singapore too. :)

Both of you got different rhyme patterns though. It's obvious it's not EXACTLY a collab. Haha!

But I don't understand the title though. I mean, the words in the bracket. :sweating:
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Re: Coleon - Don't Say A Word (Drink The Kool Aid) Feat. DerdyPK

Postby DƎRDYPK » Jan 8th, '10, 23:37

Coleon wrote:this is fuckin sick


Indeed it is :shadywink:
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Re: Coleon - Don't Say A Word (Drink The Kool Aid) Feat. DerdyPK

Postby GhanjaGod24 » Jan 8th, '10, 23:41

Coleon wrote:Done To This Beat

(Chorus)

(Derdy PK)
all i ever see is war, money, greed & hate
I can't chill & relax so I need to take
hits of the sweet leaf to elevate my mind
I just wanna have a good time celebrate & rhyme
but its hard to mellow out when I see mothers crying
cause of war jets flying then you see others dying
tell me what we're fighting for? Oil & Land?
what we need to do is march on the soil & stand
up against the government for feeding us lies
they don't care what we think are they treating us right?
if they were not everything would be an endless fight
I don't even know what to think on this restless night
i'v never wrote like this or have I spoke like this
If you can't feel what I say get a throat slice BITCH!
I'm tired of depression & the way the world work
I might as well be quiet.. & don't say a word


(Chorus)

(Coleon)
Oil cans, blood drenched hands that spoil the land
Control power, people just appointed to rant
So stories we chant, victory, are decoys to advance
Minds vacant, racin’ rampant but void in a trance

Foil the plans, trains of thought consolidated
Big Brothers watchin, nonchalant wit operations
Stopping occupations unemployed on a constant basis
So jakes are strayin’, hatred starts the cause deflation

Behind bars, incarcerated, but still scheming though
We can grow, thrive & climb the steepest slope
Kings & thieves elope, overthrow the highest man
Don’t deny it and, give sight to plight, with mic I stand

Slight of hand, illusions groom the righteous land
Fight & stand, who revives the strife & damned
A kinder stance, when we say it’s all conspiracy
Won’t say a word...Man…you just ain’t hearin’ me


(Chorus)



I really like this a lot, you guys should def keep doing more shit together :y: :y:
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Who eva go next on the mic, he put a booger ew
And mad his exit on some calm shit
Begged em' on the regular for kegs of more Vomitspit."
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